Faith, Draft 1, 1 5, outline, CH 11 (Patreon)
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2021-08-25 12:00:11
Edited:
2022-07-12 10:21:07
Imported:
2022-09
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Faith in the Family, Commentary, CH 11
Thomas is talked into taking/taking over a safe sex class with somewhat disastrous result.
I think this is a chapter where me and Ben might end up arguing. The changes he made to the story I feel gut the tension out of it. Where I have Thomas utterly freaking out at realizing he might very well be infected by a lot of deadly diseases, He had him pretty much process the whole thing quickly. The over beats of the story are still there, but I don’t know how well they work in his version.
So that’s it on the comments, I hope you enjoy the file.