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Chapter 57 (Patreon)

Published:
2019-10-13 05:01:00
Edited:
2019-10-17 00:04:11
Imported:
2020-09

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Did it go the way you expected?

This is an autopost. I am off having adventures. Leave me your thoughts for when I return.

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Chris Mantakounis

Good word carten, instead of good work

Thransk

The guild master part reads like a principal lecturing a naughty student lol

Gardor

He's going shopping with 10 tell?

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter. That subverted a lot of expectations.

Joshua Little
>>27831600

Thought the same too but then remembered their previous arguments. He might actually mean word (sundries), considering they bicker about the fancy words they use all the time.

GunySa

MORE!! I NEED MORE!!!!!! awesome chapter

Anonymous

That was pretty cool to have subverted expectations

Anonymous

Well, I guess Halgrave is not as much of an asshole as we though before, he does seems like a decent guy now that they sit down and talk. But then I wonder how much shit did the Watch gave him just for a rookie using a harmless cleaning spell, enough to lose it and just kick him out of the city in a fit of anger. Though Lavarro also mentioned he was an asshole (wasn't she his ex-wife?), that didn't helped at all in getting a good impression of him. On another note, Lavarro probably knows who were the people that "stole" her dungeon on the cave, not just because they were with her when she discovered it but also because Rain appeared out of nowhere with 500 tel in just a month... I wonder what she will about it. It would be funny if the roles reverse, where now is Halgrave helping Rain in one way or another against Lavarro lol.

Empty Shelf
>>27833006

I think you're giving Halgrave too much credit. More likely he's thinking Rain has a backer now and is just trying to smooth things over. He seems too shallow and petty to have any real depth.

closeded

The turn around with Halgrave seems cheap. You build him up as a power mad ass hole, then have him apologize for essentially mugging rain of 10 tel and ordering him to die, then he still keeps the 500 tell fee, and all the while Rain licks his boots while acting like Halgrave is doing him a massive favor for not being irrational this time. Halgrave is still a power mad entitled ass hole; the only thing new from this chapter, is that in addition to being shortsighted and naive, Rain is a prideless boot lick. Honestly, Rain is well on his way to becoming my least favorite MC.

Orion Dye
>>27834124

Disagree, most positions of power have fewer freedoms and more responsibilities than one would think. It makes perfect sense that a guy whose job it is to babysit the adventurers of the city while keeping the other power blocks from dismantling or controlling them all the while wishing he could be out doing quests instead would lose his shit when some rando comes along and endangers the whole operation for a completely trivial reason. His response was justified, in my mind.

reji

Wow, this is an unexpected upgrade from adventuring chapters. Welcome back!

It'sATap

I just want Rain to go and utterly rob the sewers of all that sweet sweet slime tel. He easily combo a max range detection with (if he takes it) a max range shear insta kill on all the slimes anywhere near him.

Imp

Meh, with all due respect, I'm not a fan of this chapter. We have an alternative perspective from Gus for some reason - it doesn't really add to the chapter. We didn't need to hear him hark on some problems custom tailored for Rain to fix, we didn't need to see reactions to the new armor. We have a random perspective for no reason that could have been covered by Rain's own increased perception. Then we jump to Rain's perspective. Rain gets into the city (without ID somehow, a bit of a blank question, but not a big deal). Goes to talk to Hargrave. I still consider Hargrave an asshole. I don't care how "frustrated" someone is - taking them out physically on others is what abusers do. "I only hit you because i love the guild." To further underline the problem, this whole "you can answer wrong and still not be let in despite paying the fine" also leaves me with a bad taste; he paid the fine, he took his punishment. Suddenly that's not enough? After that, we get to see a bit of food talk. Good enough, a bit of wind-down time. That last part doesn't bother me much, but the first person perspective shift to someone that will likely never be a major character just feels awkward to me, done solely to set Rain up to be some awesome figure now, and what feels like an attempt to make Hargrave not too bad of a guy is likewise clumsy after his very questionable acts.

reji
>>27835702

+1, author should focus on Rain and Rain's thing. All low votes as far I see comes from bad makeup characters, strange talks and "make up to make Rain looks awesome/solely to explain to readers". Average, this chapter is still better than chapters from adventuring times, imho. Still worse when Rain doesn't know how to talk)

L Pedersen

Wow, as always the comments section is full of people only capable of viewing the world through the perspective of their own values and principles. I like this chapter very much, I would have been fine with Halgrave being a two-dimenstional cartoon villain with his only motivation for his every action being "He's an evil asshole". But I much prefer some depth, once again we've seen that the world is deeper and much more complex and realistic than it first appeared to Rain when he was struggling with the language. Keep up the good work!

Anonymous

I like the mc but he seems a little too tame if you know what I mean even for person who come from earth, I mean i live in one of the most peaceful country in the world and I don't think that way

Ole Halvorsen
>>27836455

Yes a strongly agree with your thoughts on this chapter. I really don't mind that we get small gimps of other characters and what they think as long as it does not take anything away from rain. Feel like many authors of these kind of story goes totally overboard with viewpoints from other main characters, and especially in stories like these where the pace is slow it's important that we mostly stay with the main character. I also feel like the part with Halgrave was really believable and shows that he takes greater care to try to not making the characters to one dimensional.

Anonymous

my favourite chapter in a while, i'm glad he's back 4.5/5, would be 5/5 if there was a blue box, but obviously it wouldn't fit for this chapter.. so maybe i'll change it to 5/5

Mmmmyes

I like the chapter. A satisfying ending to the first adventure.

Anonymous

I hope the pace will pick up now that he's back in the city. I really miss the speed of the first chapters, where each chapter was a day worth of events. Also, why does Rain only have 480 tel? I thought he earned 500 tel back during his first delve, and then he decided to split the rest of the reward with the others. The whole thing seems a bit artificial, especially after the conversation he had with Ameliath. I thought he was past the 'I have to survive' stage, and he could plan what he wanted to do from now on. Sure, he can do quest and earn money easily, but the whole point was doing something because he wanted to, not he needed to. He can do quest because he wants to be helpful rather than because he need food to eat. Making him broke just to move the plot forward seems a step back instead.

Anonymous

“Good word, Carten,” - I think you meant "Good work".

Alex C
>>27838837

Nah he's complementing carten on his use of large words!

L Pedersen
>>27838543

A lot of tel was used up in making his armor, he essentially "paid" for that. Also they changed the way they split the tel so the others would get tel as well I think. I don't mind him being broke right now, he won't stay that way for very long it's just gonna serve as short term motivation for the next chapter or two

Luminant
>>27835004

Oh god, please no don't use shear under the city yet! We still don't know if it breaks things around him. Refrigerate and/or immolate should work just fine.

J H
>>27836724

He was kind of a depressed loser and loner on earth. It's not surprising that he would be timid even by our standards, which by the standards of that world are absurd. He's also in a very vulnerable position in a place he doesn't know well and where he only now has a few friends. He can't afford to piss off Halgrave unless he wants to totally abandon the only area he knows a little bit and where all his friends are.

Anonymous

well, i liked the chapter , the pov in the beginning was nice , the part with halgrave i didn't like it so much, especially the part where he is trying to find ways to apologise, i get that he did something wrong ( a really minor thing ) but the consequences was way too much for such a minor thing ( injuring him and taking all his money AND taking his way of making money AND a place to live , he became jobless , homeless , pennyless , and had to live in a place where he could die at any moment ) and pay a huge debt , the fact that he just acepted that and probably will forget about it and let it be it's a little... i don't know , doesn't sit well for me, even if it's the adult thing to do, hope he doesn't forget and has consequences for halgrave, even if it's to make a statment

Anonymous

this MC is really quite pathetic. timid coward and naive, 2 of the worst traits possible for an MC

tibbish
>>27861223

He isn't really a born fighter, had a relatively sedentary paper pushing job back on Earth from what I recall, and has only seen combat a few times and even then mostly when backed by a team so what were you expecting? Its gonna take some time for the guy to find his back bone and big changes don't happen overnight or even over a few months to someones personality most of the time. Just give the character and story some chance to develop is all I'm really saying. Its still quite early days for Rain's adventuring at this point

Anonymous
>>27843100

You have to remember Halgrave is a single super cop and Rains situation is special. Other people would have friends/family to go back to. It was like firing a new employee. Sure Halgrave was rough but an ounce of prevention is worth a pound of cure. Also with how PvP combat is strike first to win, this mentality probably carries over to other things. Policing people who all carry invisible ‘guns’ that can be used at any time would make anyone annoyed at someone waving said ‘gun’ about. There is a definite under current of fear in regular people to skills. Sure 99%+ are good but it only takes a couple of incidents to get people excited. Again the metaphor of invisible guns is quite apt. If you just got a gun and started waving it around in the street and shooting it into the sky, Rains punishment is quite tame compared to modern society, which could easily give years in prison for reckless endangerment.

It'sATap

I really hope this story doesn't go the way of the litrpg. Where they get to like chap 50 and then slow down so much that you end up having entire chapters where they dither on whether or not to use butter or mayo. The first chapters were great because we got to see Rain skyrocket in power quickly, but if he spends the next 10 chapters without gaining a single level/big gear upgrade or even if he doesn't make a lot of money, I'll be disappointed. It's no fun to watch a fantasy protagonist stagnate or get embroiled in political intrigue