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Help me with my blurb! (Patreon)

Published:
2018-10-11 19:59:53
Edited:
2018-10-14 02:20:04
Imported:
2022-09

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EDIT: I went with the 2nd one. Overwhelming support for it, and my publisher liked it better.


Comments

Anonymous

The 2nd one intrigues me better.

Alice

I like both but personally like the 1st a bit more altho the 2nd seems to be a heavy favorite

Raymond Jeffries

I think I prefer the second option.

Anonymous

Hands down!! Alternative version!!

John White

The first one reads like a a review. It's too much of a literal summary. The short and sweet second one is great for pulling us in with intrigue.

Anonymous

# 2 is my vote

Anonymous

The 2nd is a better hook.

Florida Reader

I like # 2. But change the phrase: " stealing the home's magic" to "stealing the magic within" or "stealing the powerful magic within."