Descriptions are Hard (Patreon)
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Hello!
I'm working on a particular description in Mist's office that... has been giving me some trouble. I got to a point where it's not bad, but I'm still not entirely happy with it. I was feeling a bit lost, but then I remembered: I have wonderful people on Patreon who can help me a bit with this!!! I hope you don't mind lending me just a little bit of your time.
So, I'm trying (and failing) to describe these candles — because omg look at them. Beautiful.
My question for you is: does this description give you even a general idea of what's in the image? If not, could you explain a bit why? Like, it's not clear what they are/ where the flames are coming from, etc.
Thank you all in advance! 😊
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Three candles line both sides of the desk, but these are candles unlike any you've seen before. If it wasn't for the soft, orange glow emanating from the inside, you'd think these were little statues instead.
The wax is perfectly sculpted to form a woman's bust. All six are identical, sharing the same headset with beige hair curling along the hairline. Their necks are long and elegant and ease onto two sharp collarbones. But it's their eyes that hold you captive.
They're hollow but not empty. A flame burns within, melting the wax from inside and spilling it through their eyelids and down their cheeks. They're weeping, all six of them.
Each head is turned purposely to face whoever sits on the opposite side of the desk. You feel the weight of their stare, crying tears of hot wax as flames eat away at their form.