Starfighter Script Chat (Patreon)

Hello, everyone!😍💕 

So, I have this big Starfighter script with bulletpoints, descriptions, and some dialogue, like above, for scenes where I have something really specific in mind. However, even when I think I have something mapped out, I sometimes realize it maybe isn't working as well as I thought it did.. and it has to change on the final page. 😖💨 I thought it would be fun to share one of these instances!

I had always intended for Cain and Abel's relationship to grow from pure attraction and lust to companionship- they start out as strangers getting off and gradually become attached.. In the big climax (heh) where Abel confronts Cain about his ongoing deceit, I had originally intended for Cain to throw this attachment back in his face. But in the end, I felt that there was a lot happening in this scene, and Cain's emotions needed a more stable direction: he would be more interested in reconciling with Abel at this point, and to throw in a cruel remark in at this point would have reset the dialogue to Cain being on edge again when I wanted him to be more vulnerable..

Of course I love Cain making mean remarks and calling Abel a slut behind his back, so this was naturally a piece of dialogue I enjoyed!😂 

I am not sure if I could have wedged it in to an earlier point in the scene, but I am happy with how it worked out in the end after I adjusted it. This was a juicy bit of dialogue I had wanted to include, but the flow is a bit more coherent without it.

Thisbe (the Starfighter site webmaster and shop manager) helps me out so much with dialogue! Sometimes he'll let me know that something isn't working out, even when it's hard to change when you have your heart set on something.. 😤💨

I hope it's helpful (or fun) to read a little bit about the process!🤗💨💕 Thank you so much, as always!