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I spent most of today struggling with a wonky keyboard—apparently, there was a reason that the fancy ergonomic one I’d gotten was on clearance (the guy at OfficeMax said that they no longer carry the model, even). There was some confusion given that I had no receipt, but shout out to Todd (the OfficeMax guy) for being cool and issuing me a refund anyway (which was promptly spent on another keyboard).
Anyhow, I need to go back through my edits for Chapter 8 since half the variables now say “PLACEHOLDER” given that my +/= key wasn’t working (neither were half my punctuation keys, but I worked around that with some judicious copy and paste). As I was editing all this earlier tonight and thus rereading Chapter 8 for the umpteenth time in the process, I realized that I wanted to use this post to discuss some of my current editing conundrums and ask for some more targeted feedback.
(That being said, the comments I did receive were great! So great that I want more, if y'all would be so kindly inclined.)
These questions are about changes that I’ve already made/am in the process of making, yet still still see some possibility for expansion.
Feedback Questions
1) Initially, I’d planned for Button and Kenzie’s backstories to have a lot more reactivity when meeting with Vengeance. This is being added in to later chapters, but are there any other ways that you would like Button and Kenzie to pretend to have met? So far the options are childhood friends, via Podium, at an animal shelter, or during a fundraiser for Mayor Z (this last option is going to gain a lot of new commentary from the peanut gallery of Reese and AL).
2) Buttons who choose Sally as their MIVs now have a much more romantic scene with lots of fluffy reassurances on both sides. Buttons interested in matchmaking Sally and Nick together now have the option to do so (provided your MC expresses interest in doing so). I like the new version of this that I have now, but was there anything that those choosing to match the two might want to see or think should be addressed? (Again, I want to stress that the two do not get together in game unless Button actively encourages them.)
3) I’ve done some minor tweaks to Rosy and Gray’s training scenes to drop more lore and incorporate ace pathways, but any suggestions over those scenes are also welcome since they’re pretty significant romance-wise. And for those interested in the asexual romance routes for Rosy and Gray: is there anything in particular that you would like to see altered or added?
4) I’m pretty happy with the Podium sections, especially after editing. But feedback on that is of course welcome as well! I’m considering making Button respond to an additional comment from a user that’s clearly Caleb, but am worried that might the online profile segment too long. I don't want Podium to wear out its welcome, and there's only so much cringe content that readers can take.
5) Scenery was tricky for me in this chapter. (Let's get real: scenery is always tricky for me since I'm about as visual as a naked mole rat.) Were there any scenes that you felt the description needed to be fleshed out? Any transitions that were unclear or confusing?
Again, these are only questions regarding Chapter 8. I have twice as many for Chapter 9, but I’ll post those next week.