H-space Story Re-works - Sun, Snakes and the Great Uncle Fergus Stash (Patreon)

I said I was re-working some of the old H-space bestiary stories.  Here's one of them.  I can't put this one on Literotica as the original version is already on there.  It's the Sun Lamia story.  You can read the original at this link:

https://www.literotica.com/s/sucked-by-the-sun-lamia 

The goal of the re-works is to take the originals (which are mostly just the monster girl sex scene) and add a story to them.  That should then turn them into a complete short story similar to the ones I've put in various collections over the years.  Once I have enough (13 or so), I'll send them off to the publisher as a themed collection to go up on Amazon and other sellers.

The sun lamia story was one of the more complete ones (which is why I put it up on literotica), but it did get some negative/neutral comments about being too short.  I've added some more interaction between Bate and the scarlet imp, and added more hints of world-building for the sun lamia's temple.  That actually took two attempts to get right, but I think it's now a much more atmospheric setting rather than a short, vague paragraph Bate passes through before getting jumped.

I'm putting this one up to get reader's impressions.  While I want to get the stories up to a target word count of 4-5K, the additions should add something and not just be needless padding.

So let me know what you think.

I've attached the newer version as both a word .doc and a .pdf.  I hope you enjoy it.