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I made some rather sizable revisions to the part I posted before, so I am reposting all of Chapter 18 that I have written so far. 

Warnings: I have tried, really hard, to keep this within a T rating, but due to the subject material I don't know if I succeeded. The caribou are another trope being deconstructed, from a misogynistic porn fanfic series that somehow ended up popular enough to have several stories written in it, so there are a lot of references in here to rape and slavery, though nothing is described in any detail and there is a lot of euphemism being employed. Thoughts as to the success or failure of my attempt at keeping it T rating level are appreciated.

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Brian Higgins

Just another minor thing that might help dial you back towards T. The guards actively being pleasured while on duty? Might want to remove that. Discord was noting how that was supposed to impress on visitors how prepared the guards were to jump to action and/or how safe the palace is, but I think just the presence of the dancers would be enough to get that across. Of course, I never read that series that you're apparently addressing in this chapter so I don't know if that's an actual thing that happened in one of its stories.

Gianluca Fernandez

Well I am completely enjoying this new chapter I have got to say but it kills me everytime to see that I can't read anymore words.

Alara Rogers

Not so much an actual specific thing, as an illustration of the fact that the entire society is geared around degrading sex, and there is pretty much no situation that it doesn't enter into. I've trimmed some of the more egregious bits you pointed out, though.