Script - UY Harem Hypnosis (Patreon)

Hi there! I've just been informed that the artist I was oging to commission for the Shimoneta series is currently busy. Darn! I'll try to get him to draw these next month.

In the meantime, I thought it might be fun to share this with you. In fact, I intend to share the script for the first ten pages for each of the series I suggested in a poll at the start of the month, every two weeks from now on. I will post the Code Geass - Japanophilia first ten page script in two weeks time.

I will also likely start polls very soon on stories that I would like to write. While this coming week looks too busy for me to do that, next week should be a bit better. I will open that poll tomorrow, so keep an eye out for it!

On with the script.

Page 1: Shinobu arrives at the Moroboshi home, finding only Lum there.

Shinobu approaches the Moroboshi residence carrying a bag. She notices part of the belly dancer uniform showing, and tucks it in, then knocks on the door.

Narration: My name is Shinobu Miyake

Lum answers the door.

L: Shinobu? Darling isn't here right now.

S: I know, he's out with his parents. May I come in?

Narration: I'm a perfectly ordinary girl.

Page 2:

Narration: My ex-boyfriend is Ataru Moroboshi.

L: I'm not in the mood for an argument about Darling.

S: Oh, I'm not here for an argument. I'd like to help you seduce that idiot once and for all!

Narration: The unluckiest and most perverted boy in the galaxy.

L: Huh? Is that right? Come in, come in!

Lum flies upstairs, Shinobu checks her out as she flies up

Page3:

In Ataru's room. Lum is sitting in the middle of the air, while Shinobu is on the floor.

Narration: Why would a nice, innocent girl like me date someone like him?

Lum: So? So? What's this about seducing Darling?

Narration: I told myself I was trying to change him.

Shinobu: To be honest, it's getting tiring. The way he's always bouncing around, hitting on girls.

(in the background for this panel, show chibi Ataru hitting on numerous girls in the street)

S: It's time to put an end to it! The only way the women of Tomobiki will be safe is if he finally settles down.

L: You say that like I haven't tried, but he always seems to ignore me.

(for this one, show chibi Lum posing seductively for Ataru while he looks at her out of the corner of his eye, like he's looking but doesn't want to seem like he's looking)

Narration: But now I accept the truth.

(Shinobu reaches into her bag)

Shinobu: It'll be easier if I show you.

Page 4:

Narration: I'm a pervert too.

Shinobu has changed into her belly dancer's outfit.

L: Huh? What's this?

S: It's called belly dancing. I'm going to teach you how to do it.

A few poses from Shinobu, showing she's dancing, while Lum is just watching confused.

Page 5:

Narrator: I have a bit of a harem fetish, you see.

Shinobu continues dancing throughout this page

L: I don't know, this seems a little silly.

S: Trust me, I know what I'm talking about.

S: He'll be putty in your hands in no.

S: Time.

S: Flat.

Narration: Ataru is the only boy I know that's got what it takes to try for one.

Page 6:

Shinobu continues dancing

Narration: But that's not the only fetish I have.

S: Give it a try! It's a lot of fun!

Narration: There's another fetish I have, that I've never been able to fulfill.

L: If you're sure...

Narration: Until recently, that is. When I finally worked it out.

Page 7:

Lum starts dancing too, but is much less confident than Shinobu.

Narration: Hypnosis. I have a very strong hypnokink.

L: This is silly, tcha! Dancing like this won't -

S: Don't knock it until you try.

S: Just stop thinking and let your body move for you.

L: Stop thinking?

S: Yes, stop thinking.

Narration: And now that I've figured out how to turn belly dancing into a hypnosis vector?

Page 8:

Narration: I can have both of my fetishes fulfilled at once.

Shinobu embraces Lum from behind, using her hands to guide her dancing while standing very close.

L: Ah!

S: Shush now. Listen to your body. Listen to what it wants. Understand what it needs.

Page 9:

Shinobu steps away. Lum is dancing a lot more confidently now. Smiling while eyes are glazed over.

S: Almost perfect.

Shinobu stops, and retrieves a second costume from her bag, then offers it to Lum.

S: You should also look the part.

Narrator: And at the same time?

Page 10:

Narrator: Give my darling exactly what he deserves.

Ataru wanders upstairs, seeming a little frustrated.

A: Not a single cute girl there... At least Lum didn't bother me today.

Ataru opens the door to his room, and reacts in surprise

A: Huh?

Both Lum and Shinobu are dancing in the middle of the room, fully adorned in harem gear.

Both girls: Welcome home, Darling!

Narrator: Unluckiest boy in the galaxy? Please. You have no idea how lucky he's about to be!