Hot Sponge First Draft (Patreon)

For those who are new and might not know, I like to do a first draft as fast as I can and post it to patreon before doing the more minor details to see if it'll remain patreon exclusive or if I'll do the more annoying final details to make it public.

This needs to flow a bit better and the audio may need tweaking.

I think I'm going to do the same sponges with the cold activated ears and just do the crackling noises much slower and use the other mics to do the breathing stuff instead of adding the breathing as a layer to this. I personally find the audio too "busy" in this and some of the crackling too close. For the cold ears I don't think I will attempt the twin thing but have myself in behind the ears at the better condenser mics.

What do you like/dislike about this that you think could be improved upon with the cold ears?