WIP of next animation (Patreon)

Alright, so for the next animation i'm going for something longer this time, and i'll be using OCs for that (Now i'll be using them a lot more, in fact i plan tdedicate this month to them with the subject, public sex) The, kind of animatic for what i have so far on the animation is HERE 

Any idea, advice for this current animation it's welcome.