Jupiter Jet Issue One Page 9 - Script to Page Comparison (Patreon)

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PAGE 9

PANEL 1

Wide shot. Sunny.  We see the whole building where the JOHNSON REPAIR SHOP. It’s 5 floors high, counting the repair shop as floor number one. Imagine a shop from Harlem in New York. But, give it the flavor of our Jupiter Jet city. The building also has an alley to the right with a giant rain drain running down the side of it. (http://c8.alamy.com/comp/BTRDWP/stores-on-west-125th-street-in-harlem-in-new-york-seen-on-sunday-november-BTRDWP.jpg)

Jackie is flying in the same getup from the previous page. She’s landing hard and fast on the roof.

1. JACKY: Hope I’m not too late!

PANEL 2

On the alley. Jacky quickly slides down the drain pipe to street. She can hear voices from inside the shop as lowers to the street. 

1. CHUCK (OFF PANEL): Gee, Mister Bramante, we sure didn’t expect to have you grace The Johnson Repair Shop today!

2. JACKY: Almost there!

PANEL 3
Jacky rushes in the side entrance of the Repair shop. Shedding her helmet and jetpack as she steps over the threshold. From inside, we hear Bruno Bramante. 

1. BRUNO (OFF PANEL): Don’t get cute, tiny.

2. JACKY: CHUCK!

PANEL 4

Jacky slides into the front room of the JOHNSON REPAIR SHOP. From behind her to the left, we see BRUNO BRAMANTE, a fat gangster with a fedora who looks like Edward G. Robinson. (https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/thumb/d/d5/Edward_g_robinson.jpg/220px-Edward_g_robinson.jpg). He scowls at Jackie as he smokes a big cigar in front of the counter. To Jackie’s right and behind the counter are UNCLE GABRIEL and Chuck. UNCLE GABRIEL is a rancher with a cowboy hat. A little rough around the edges, but with kindnessl about him. He’s staring at Jacky, kind of irritated. Chuck is beside Gabriel looking bored. Like, SOOOOO bored. His eyes are half closed like Lisa Simpson’s when she’s bored (https://deadhomersociety.files.wordpress.com/2009/04/lisas-rival3.png?w=320&h=240). A big, fat ORANGE TABBY CAT walks across the counter in front of Chuck and he pets it. Bored. The cat’s tail obstructs part of Chuck’s face.

**Note: I think it would be cool if, as we get to see more of the Johnson Repair Shop, every time there is a newspaper lying around in the panel if it had a little Jupiter Jet on it. EASTER EGGS!

1. GABRIEL: Why are you shouting Jacky? He’s right here.

2. JACKY: Uncle Gabriel!?!

3: GABRIEL: Mr. Bramante and I were discussing your late rent payment.