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108 (Patreon)

Published:
2020-06-21 05:00:01
Edited:
2020-07-12 09:49:58
Imported:
2020-09

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Let me know what you think about the chapter. Also typos. Find them. I cannot, for I read what I meant, not what I said.

Comments

Andrew

Thank you!

Newguy Roy

I understand your comment about typos/mistakes so much! Further[more], she and Tallheart had just finished the morning culling, jumped down to follow Tallheart[.] Screw it. Rain had [spent] most of the day typing names, Lilly and [I] moved like specters in the dark. he’d set Detection to automatically ping for entities [every] thirty seconds,

Frogspoison

That was fairly anticlimatic. Honestly was expecting a bit of trouble, but I guess even Rain could use a break.u

Empty Shelf

That was...fast. O_O Not complaining, just surprised. And there wasn't a single blue box or calculation in sight? Am I reading the right story?

Alex Matheny

Page 18 3rd paragraphmissed a "I" talking about lily

Arctruth

Good resolution and reuniting. I like the dark PDF too

Boredwayfarer
>>38996780

Yea, i wa thinking rain might leave a backdoor for himself, but i guess that's not what he wants too

Ziggy

"and using magic to push it away (wouldn't) have ruined that feeling." *would Ohhh the warden wants a crazy meat puppet! Okay, that explains some things. Also, eesh. I'm sure that won't backfire terribly at some point. I know some aren't going to like it, but I enjoyed the tone of Rain missing his friends and dealing with his trauma.

Anonymous

do i understand correctly that now that the pressure is gone, rain is breaking down from holding back his resentment on velika, the pain-realm and the aftermath from the shift? other thing, i do hope the watch rewards him properly for taking care of fel sadanis. without him they wouldnt get the city back. and with "rewards properly" i absolutely do not mean the warden mindfucking him making him a puppet like lavarro or whatever shes planning on doing there.

wanderer117

Great chapter. Had the feel of the end of book 1

Tagmin

I came out of this chapter with full satisfaction, after being in the barrier arc for so long, a conclusion like this was nice. Also and quick edit "lily and moved like specters" -> "lily and I moved like specters"

Gabriel

I really like this story.

Big I

Well written chapter, and I'm glad the story is progressing. It did read as a bit abrupt though, with plenty of things happening off screen. Also, Rain blames the Citizen for the death of his friend? That surprised me.

carebear90

I really would have liked to see an assessment of Rain by one of the outside Watch people after he handed over the Barrier. I mean. It must be pretty impressive to someone who can actually interface with it.

Anonymous

I just want Rain to start making progress again. And to that point I feel let down. After spending all that time in Fel Sans it feels like remarkably little has happened. I know seeds have been planted for what may come in the future but I was already subsisting off of bread crumbs. So Rain giving up sole control without negotiating any sort of advantage for himself or his friends just feels bad man. Note: I do agree with him giving up control of the city, it was already acting as an anchor dragging him down. (just wanted him to either get an IOU or money or agreement to power level him or a soul consultation out of it)

carebear90
>>38997073

I agree, that he earned that, but I sadly highly doubt it. Considering how the Watch acted in the past they could merely classify him as an even higher security risk as long as he not becomes part of the Watch himself. Maybe in their eyes it'd be reward enough to not sentence him for "aiding the Citizen" or some bullshit like that. Who knows what trumped up charges they could come up with, if they try. I mean... he used so much magic in their city without permission... :P ^^

Anonymous

Also I know he has experienced emotional progress but one of the big appeals of litRPG genres are the numeric progression. And in that sense it feels very stagnated.

Adrian Gorgey
>>38997559

Yeah, I think out of everything the Watch could offer him, more than money or levels, the most important would be to get examined by an "expert" reader that could help him with his soul problem. This would probably not be too big an ask for his merits.

Azurus Icewind

" As odd as it sounded, the cold felt somehow right, and using magic to push it away wouldn’t have ruined that feeling." bottom of the first pargaraph of page 14, I'm pretty sure "wouldn't" should be "would"

Anonymous

This is a great chapter. An awesome point in the story and world.

cris

I quite like the pace - rains progression in power might seem slow compared to other stories but in the context of the world it makes sense

Arnon Parenti

Go Rain, save the dragon from the cervidian princess

Anonymous

so.... Rain will be able to level up again? with Tallhearts slow method.... were looking at lvl 20 in 30 chapters? maybe more? lol

Anonymous

I agree, his soul issue and questions of the soul/paling/link sight should have been questions he asked of the Guardian, just for help. Not as a demand, since that would be OOC, but it would also be OOC for him not to have asked for help from the Watch higher ups. Fake!Lavarro would agree to it as well, operating through Turton and through the Guardian, just so she could read his mind.

Joshua Little

Best chapter in a long time. So good. Hope they can move on and get Rain to silverplate now. I agree with whoever said it that seeing the Warden/Watch's perspective of Rain, after the full extent of what he did and how difficult it was is known. Thanks for the chapter.

Ao

Title drop chapters are always nice

Call0013

Mental Ward suddenly Seem very important, Considering what the Warden did to Lavarro.

J03MAN

The cold felt somehow right, and using magic to push it away *wouldn't* have ruined that feeling. Wouldn't -> would

Anonymous

Excellent denouement! It happened quite a bit faster than I expected (for a change, lol,) but I think those were some pretty well-placed timeskips. If it could be done, I would say maybe one more chapter on wrapping up the loose ends and coming down from the city arc and one less chapter trapped in the cave, but I'm sure that's been harped on enough. As others have said, I do hope Rain gets some benefit in the future for handing off the city to the Watch, but I think he will. I thought you really nailed it with the character interactions on this one, which was clearly the main focus (I was really hoping you were going to do the surprise-ameliah-by-pulling-her-through-the-barrier thing, and you did it! Woo!) Also, do my eyes deceive me, or could this be leading into some delving? All immediate loose ends tied up, Tallheart broaching the subject, no clear other direction? *Gasp* Is it true?? Haha. If so, very exciting. I'll be interested to see how you deal with the trade-off of the depth that comes from interacting with new rotating side-characters versus the intrigue of going delving in uninhabited and never-explored caves. Whatever the case, I'm excited for the future. Good luck!

Anonymous

I get the feeling that Tallheart's description of delving with his wife was really important. This could be the description of the entire next arc of the story and how it will play out. It's time to Delve. There's even a foreshadowed major achievement to end the arc: two people aren't enough to take a dragon. Now they have more.

Mike G.

Great chapter, thanks!!

Anonymous

I really enjoyed this chapter. It's a very nice conclusion of an arc that felt - intentionally, fittingly - stifling. Most of what I'd like to praise about it has already been said. I just want to note that I truly enjoy the story, and the reasonable use of LITRPG number mindwank is one of the reasons why - so, unlike some others who have commented, I'm quite glad that you're not forcing Rain's progression just to have it happen. Not that their opinions are invalid, I just want you to know that they're not the only ones.

Tycho Green

The Warden is borderline pretentious. I can barely believe how off her logic is.

Roethan
>>38998935

That would be a good way to get the clone what she wants without giving the game away. Might even help later. Probably a good tie in at some point.

Anonymous

Thank you for the relaxing chapter.

His Dad

no tables!!!

CentaureHeart

Thanks a lot for the chapter That was a much needed conclusion and relaxing chapter :)

evyatar

thanks for the chapter! we got to the end of the arc with great character development at the end, the potential now is amazing.

evyatar

hope they will form a party and go delving actually and leave politics behind for now...

Anonymous

Ameliah watched as Tallheart speak briefly with Lavarro, then towed Staavo away in the direction of the barricade. — remove the as. Thx 4 the chapter!

D

Oh what a blessed day, the arc is over. Sry, but im just happy, this one feelt so streched.

Osiris

Interested if Mariah now joins the party. I'm glad everyone can FINALLY move on now. Really feening from some power progression for Rain and Val tbh. Actually the whole crew, now that we've seen that citizens/ goldplates are really the baseline of strength in the story. The squad needs to power up.

Pyrefiend

I hope Rain tells his bath house workers about his build ideas before he leaves, like the warrior type that only uses passive skills. It would be a suitable reward for the unawakened who helped him, and it would be a shame for the ideas to go unused.

Anonymous

I'm sad that rain didn't ask for any sort of payment for the control of the barrier, I get that he needed to hand it over but he could of at least got something for it

Craig
>>38998827

Don’t get your hopes up, we might be lucky if he hits level 19 in fifty chapters

Michael Hughes

I fell asleep before I could read this. An amazing chapter. I feel sorry for Lavvaro. It seems like she is going to be taken to mind casters periodically to give info and reinforce the imprint so that she will never be free and have to watch her daughter be manipulated into the arms of the people who keep her prisoner. Anytime someone uses the phrase "The Greater Good" you know they are the bad guy. Velika gets her freedom which I am ok with. I understand Rain wanting Justice but that is an emotional response. She was manipulated, trapped, and attacked. During the shift her actions may have helped more people than she killed. Although the people she killed could have helped more people than she did so that is not a great comparison. The best part was showing Rain's raw emotional state from his long stretches of isolation. The conversation with Tallhart was jut great. It seems like the city was the quick path to power and by relinquishing control of the barrier he takes the slow path and we can get back to delving and level ups. I am so excited for what comes next. This is definitely an end of book 2 moment. I was so afraid that the watch was going to tie him to the barrier or wipe his mind after they got the caster online. I hope he gets his freedom and we can have fun with the party again. See you next time.

Thenais

Feels like the end

Alexander Dupree

Thanks for the amazing chapter. So that's the end then? Book done. No more rain.

Anonymous

Finally he's out of that bubble. I'm really not liking this warden lady. I'm hoping Rain creates some kind of travelling skill library. Cause fuck those guys.

Silver Beard

Anti climatic. Was a lot of buildup. Read like Rain was going to milk to Obelisk for all its secrets, leave Gold plate in the cold, etc... instead he meekly rolls over and has a maudlin moment with Tallheart? Really?

Silver Beard
>>39008589

Makes sense...the Warden can use the insane Guilder to kill him off ‘for the greater good’ because he know too much. They already have bad blood...who will be surprised? The end.

Anonymous

ty for the plain light version, it's nice.

Anonymous
>>39003048

well, it kinda was supposed to I suspect; trapped in there w/ "no way out", ostensibly, I imagine that's how Rain felt too! :)

Alexander Dupree
>>39009049

Eh I'm OK with it from a human perspective. People make plans and have goals especially when they're repressing grief that just don't follow through. I think that it's good writing. Rain might want to exploit something when he's feeling on top of the world but can't hold too it when his circumstances change and the pain and suffering he feels are now the only thing left. He doesn't need to stay focused 100% in order to survive any more. Now he has a moment to take a breather and he really want to just be with his friends. The ones he didn't lose.

Garrett
>>39005533

Apparently, Mariah is only level 5. That surprised me.

Imp

A good chapter, though parts of it felt... rushed. Like, last chapter Rain was all like "I'm going to milk this device for its secrets before turning it over!" But, suddenly, that plan is abandoned, with only "no more time dilation" off-hand comment to justify it. Honestly, I wouldn't even have realized that was the reason if it wasn't for other comments here. And then, there's the Warden. A whole script about her needing to get the device so she can make a second City of Lights, or whatever, and then, we suddenly jump to Rain already have given it up. I feel like there's a lot that suddenly got skipped here.

Atlas Dwarf
>>39016627

Yeah I have to agree the ending of the barrier arc fell kind of flat. I get that was done to put the focus more on Rain's character development but even that felt more telling than showing near the end there. I get that some people were annoyed by the length of the barrier arc but I don't think cropping out the ending will sit well. Granted that would take longer and those skipped tidbits will certainly be covered later.

ZaA
>>39008167

I might remember wrong, but p sure the Warden said that they'd remove Lavarros mind/kill her, and the warden would use her body as a means to help the world, as she can't do some things that need to be done, because she cares about the image of the watch too much, but Lavarro(her body) doing shit to help wouldn't affect the watch. The warden seems to have good ideals that have been warped by power

Newguy Roy

Found another one! but only in exceptional circumstances would a rare one [be] provided at level five.

Ryan

A good chapter! As other users have noted, there is a glaring defect here: Rain says that he is going to milk the secrets of this tool before giving it over in the previous chapter. In this chapter, he gives it over right away! You could resolve this defect by doing two things: 1. noting skepticism on Rain's part wrt who he adds to the admin list on the barrier. Rain then checks with several people inside the barrier- these people vet the candidate in question, who Rain then adds to the list. 2. Rain notes a few things that he wants in exchange for releasing access to the barrier. Notably, 2A. he is guaranteed continued unrestricted access to the barrier stone, contingent on him not modifying the user list beyond "reasonable" limits. 2B. something something help regarding his soul problems. Offer of a tutor for entering his fractured and damaged soul 2C. A promise of help raising his level cap to at least 25 Possibly a subset of these, depending on what is helpful for the plot. The Watch can say that they cannot offer some of those because of challenges or ignorance. Possibly, Tallheart or Ami are questioned for basic advice on some of these, before Rain makes his move. You could probably resolve these concerns in 2-3 paragraphs, if that was your goal - a conversation with Tallheart, a paragraph doing a small bit of negotiation, and a sentence or two about vetting the candidate.

wanderer117
>>39032494

Rain does comment that he can no longer access the deep functions of the stone, like time dilation, but that he is happy about that since he was very lonely during his weeks in isolation.

Anonymous

Enjoyed the wardens unreliable narration. Seeing some delving on the horizon. Kinda hoping Rain used his leverage to get something

Anonymous

I wasn't necessarily unhappy w/ the ending per se, but the skip leading to it bugged me (I never like skips, that's just me). And w/ the skip and somewhat skimpy coverage of the what and why might bug some. None of it was implausible...just not entirely set up, nor shown. It's like there's a chapter or two missing. But I still enjoyed it, overall. It kinda went from "hot and bothered" to "post coital cigarette" while skipping the inbetween... ;) More literally, it showed stuff got resolved, but skipped the actual resolution (or parts of it). Seems like a fairly key time period to skip, after slogging thru all the time stuck under the dome leading up to it? idk.

RedFaux

Can't access the chapter. Attachment is not found

Anonymous

Guys...the benefits and secrets learned from the obelisk will become apparent the next time Rain attempts to access his soul. SS used a very small timeskip because he doesn't want to spoil the surprise.

Anonymous

I really like the pacing of this story. I feel like the reason people want faster progression is mostly because there is only 1 chapter a week and this is a story that really leaves you hungry for more.

Harley Shockley

I have a thought on where this might go. In the last chapter, Rain had a soul fragmentation of 99%. What would happen if he created a program or macro that defragmented his soul? Would his level go up? If so, Rain, with his LinkSight, can give this program to the others in the party to help them all level up. Now, my next thought is on the relation between Endurance and Recovery. Endurance can be thought of as Rain's armor, with durability (health) and hardness (tolerance). Like rain's armor broke in compromised places in this chapter, Endurance, when damaged, will create kinks in a person's body in which tolerance is weaker, if not outright 0 without the ability to heal. Recovery helps both the durability (health) and hardness (tolerance) of those areas by repairing the kinks like Rain's armor does to itself. It will start off very soft before going back to the same tolerance as the rest of the body. the speed of the recovery depends on the Recovery and Endurance. That is the relation of Recovery to Endurance, but what does Endurance provide to Recovery? I believe that Endurance provides a second sort of meter that I like to call nutrients. This provides energy to Strength and Vigor in larger or more efficient doses depending on their stats in relation to Endurance. This is why Strength and Vigor make a person feel hungry. Recovery Is both the recovery of the body as well as how efficient it is. This is why both Endurance and Recovery allow a person to not feel all that hungry.

Anonymous

If soul fragmentation is similar to disk fragmentation, it's probably due to Rain applying more exp to his soul than it has room for, causing it to store the exp in inefficient/different areas. Defraging his soul will probably not increase his level, just like defraging a computer does not increase it's core statistics. Rain would not be able to give his friends a link sight program for two reasons. Reason number one is he stated Linksight does not function well in the real world. Reason number two is that seeing things as computer programs is a characteristic specific to Rain. The other members of his party all see their souls as very different. Val, for example, sees his stats/soul as an array of crystals and runes. I don't think Rain would be able to interface with his friends souls unless he developed a hybrid control panel for each of them, which seems very, very unlikely. The obelisk is the one that initiated the development of a hybrid control panel, so there's nothing to suggest a player's soul will do that naturally.

Anonymous
>>39130331

Though, just to play the devil's advocate here, Rain could develop a program that could teach itself how to synchronize with other people. The process by which deep learning computers like Watson and Deepmind use to learn new things using an endlessly recursive series of trial and error would eventually lead to a solution to this problem. This would, however, require a very specific skillset from his previous life.

Anonymous

RR Synopsis was recently updated. It sheds some light on the intent and direction of the story... in case it wasn't clear already. https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/25225/delve

Atlas Dwarf
>>39191000

"Definitely not a harem." He thinks he can stop the Rain x Lavarro/Velika/Warden/Barrier Stone-chan shipping.

Anonymous

Well I have egg on my face. Like others have said this feels anticlimactic, and I was betting on at least 7 more chapters before this arc closed. And it still feels like we're missing those chapters. There are so many threads practically glued together in this chapter and (at least I feel) a couple of missed opportunities. The Empire just cut and ran. On 1 hand it's completely understandable, if not logical, that they would do so. Their surprise attack on the city failed, they were attacked by Citizens, and were deep in enemy territory. At least they got to kill a couple of the Citizens and only lost some expendable troops in the process. Issue is that these kinds of organizations are built upon their reputation, a reputation of fearlessness, of being unstoppable. The moment they showed their hand to them it was effectively preordained that the city was their's but they failed, that in itself should be a problem. The capital "E" Empire failed to openly take a city after making their intentions known, killing both Citizen and Watch combatants and they got nothing tangible in the process. Nothing to spin it in their favor. Val's father being able to kill Citizens wasn't even up for discussion so his win isn't their's unless they say THEY made him do it. But they can't because everybody knows he's a slave who doesn't wanna be there. They don't even know anything about the artefact, how it works, who found it, if it can be moved, nothing. This should be important be we don't even see how it plays out. The Citizens just let Velika go, or rather she just left. Gone with all their voices in her head, potential secrets with her. With nobody apparently caring, not the Citizens, the Watch, the Guild, or the Empire. What the hell is the Guild doing? Almost every other group is breaking the rules looking out for their group's future but the Guild is the only one with their dicks in their hands doing apparently nothing. I'm not saying there should be some super secret gold plate hiding in the bushes but nothing? Won't this make them look weak and easily pushed around? Even if it were just a token show of force they did nothing while all these deals were being made? And again where is Halgrave? His ex-wife and daughter were trapped and he's in the City of Lights playing with a disco ball. And last but not least what about the Warden and Lavarro? The Warden is a diamond plate, among the strongest of the strong, comparable to Val's father if not stronger but the barrier kept him out why would it let her in or at least her power? Her name wasn't on the list Lavarro's was. It blocks all forms of communication but not mind magic apparently. That could've been an incredibly interesting piece of plot that nothing was done with, a free Lavarro who knows the moment she steps outside the barrier The Warden comes back. Having said all that, the character interactions were very good here. A bit rushed but good. Exactly what we wanted to see.

Bryan
>>39240570

I'm pretty sure that the warden's consciousness in Lavarro is a copy of the original warden that can be absorbed back once the copy takes Lavarro back to wherever she is.

Bad Timing

Is this the official End of book one? Because it looks like a good cutting point.

Anonymous

loving it

Signspace

I liked it. I honestly wouldn't be mad for this to be a soft conclusion for awhile. Or even for a timeskip right now. The story has ended it's first true arc. Now it is time to start a new one. Where will it lead? I do not know, I imagine it will have to do with Rain, Ameliah, Tallheart, Val, Jamus, and Carten going of to do some fucking Delving! Finally!

returner

After like a billion chapters of being trapped in the city, this has to be the most anticlimactic way of ending this arc. I'm just glad it's over. +1 to the comment about this being called Delve and having like 3 chapters of delving