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Zac stepped off the platform, taking in the fresh air of Earth. It felt like the sweetest perfume after smelling nothing but ash, steel, and blood for over two months. The honeymoon phase after dealing a blow to the Kan'Tanu had been woefully short, and the shocking appearance of the Kan'Tanu Pope hadn't stopped the battles at the lower levels. If anything, the Alliance was desperate to communicate they weren't backing down.

The worry hidden in the corners of the frontline soldiers' eyes was present in his subordinates back home. Alliance had tried to keep things under wraps, but how could the Kan'Tanu pope's terrifying prowess be kept under wraps? Three Field Armies had been annihilated to the last man, turned into fodder for a Heart Curse the size of a planet.

Even then, the common populace didn't know just how bad it actually was. Zac had pieced together the truth by extracting snippets from his many connections over the past month. Dozens of Monarchs had fallen during the assault, including three of the extremely limited Late-stage Monarchs of the sector. Two more Late Monarchs were grievously wounded. With their advanced ages, they were essentially out for the count.

In addition, multiple Clan-protecting relics had been expended to drive back the bloody pope and his subordinates. Altogether, it was a devastating blow to Zecia's peak strength and a painful reminder that numbers couldn't make up for raw strength in the Multiverse. When the pope returned, there would be fewer guardians to hold him off. If they failed, Zecia would have another Eventide Asura event on their hands.

The outsiders didn't participate in the battle, though Zac had to admit they had a hand in making the Kan'Tanu back off. It wasn't out of benevolence or camaraderie. They couldn't let the war end early, as it was the best way to form Karma with the upcoming event. Ideally, they wanted a stalemate, where their champions could gather fate by wantonly butchering natives in a locked war.

If you needed to find something good coming from the disaster, it would be that the added pressure acted as a catalyst for growth. Everyone was feeling the pressure, the abject weakness before the Kan'Tanu's peak masters. It broke the spirits of some, but hearts had been tempered by close to a year of constant battle.

His subordinates were no different and used the suffocating pressure as fuel for change. They worked harder than ever, and not just the soldiers. Zac could barely recognize the war camp as he passed through it on his way to the teleportation station. It had been completely rehauled, turning into a monolith of steel and impregnable strength.

The ingenious designs would be familiar to anyone who had visited the Ensolus Ruins or any other remnant of the Limitless Empires. The bases were simplified versions of the ancient schematics Galau brought back from the fortress.

The designs collected in the Sixth Centurion Lighthouse and Galau's insights into arrays triggered an industrial revolution. Ishiate Tinkerers, Volor Stoneturtles, and artisans worked tirelessly to expand their operations. Millions were hired to open up huge foundries on Pangea and Ensolus, and the first prototypes had already left the production line. It wasn't enough to change the overarching direction of the war, but it would make the Atwood Empire's upcoming ascension smoother.

The three designs far beyond the Atwood Empire's capabilities, which they provided the Alliance free of charge, could potentially nudge things in Zecia's favor, though Zac wasn't overly optimistic. He'd seen the schematics and their unbelievable intricacy. Construction would take years of trial and error, if it could be done at all.

Nevertheless, Galau was personally making great strides since joining his ranks. His war designation became Chief Engineer, and his seal quests were progressing even faster than Zac's shipyard quests. He'd given up on any hopes of becoming a true Merchant already, shifting his goal to becoming a titan of the arms industry.

There were still a few hours before the meeting, and Zac didn't want to seclude himself in his cave until then. The course had already been set, and he would spend enough time in seclusion already. Instead, Zac toured his Empire, visiting cities on both Ensolus and Earth. It was impossible to escape the notices plastered everywhere, and the messages were always the same.

Half were the recruitment posters for the army and its support branches. The second was the upgrade notice. In three days, Earth would ascend, becoming a Middle D-grade world. The notices urged everyone to stay calm during the upheavals. Zac had already seen recordings of F- and E-grade worlds. The upgrade didn't create much of a commotion, but the energy levels involved were far lower than what Earth would face.

Zac walked unnoticed among the populace despite his unique Draugr appearance, thanks to the shrouding items he wore. Eventually, he found himself before an institution he hadn't visited before; Blackwood College. It made him recall a few matters. He deactivated his equipment, which caused some commotion among the guards until they realized who had just popped out of nowhere.

"Emperor Umbri'Zi!" the Revenant soldiers greeted with respectful bows.

Blackwood College was one of Elysium's elite training grounds and where many of the martially endowed Revenants ended up after their six-month general orientation. Raising undead citizens was quite different from their living counterparts, at least in Port Atwood, where the naturally-born undead still made up less than one percent.

A Revenant raised from a cultivator could technically restart their journey the moment their spirit awoke, and madness gave way to sapience. However, these people were blank slates, ignorant of everything you'd normally learn as you grew up. As such, newly awakened had to go through a comprehensive course that would allow them to function in society.

It sounded almost impossible to impart the upbringing, experience, and basic education that young adults possessed in such a short time. Then again, awakened Revenants were born with fully-formed minds and bodies, and the orientation's first two weeks were a training course that allowed them to get used to their bodies while gaining levels and a few titles.

At that point, they'd have enough attributes to be considered unprecedented geniuses in a pre-integration society, and they rapidly soaked up everything they needed to know. It even seemed as though they were re-learning as much as learning, with their predecessors' experiences becoming something akin to instinct. Still, orientation would normally last three full years to provide better foundations and give them more time to find themselves.

That wasn't possible with Zecia's current situation. They had no choice but to accelerate the process so the awakened could graduate to military training camps, factories, or the many other departments that screamed for manpower. Only those displaying the greatest potential could continue their studies in elite institutions such as the Blackwood College or the Atwood Academy.

"Good work. Don't mind me," Zac said to the guards, smiling as he saw Pika run over.

"Lord Atwood, we weren't expecting you today," Pika said. "Are you performing an inspection? Is it the Echelon Class?"

Zac nodded after some thought. "In a bit. I'm here to see Max first. Where is he?"

"Max? He should be on the Sword Plateau," Pika said, her head gaining a hesitant tilt before continuing with a whisper. "He's… confused. There is something wrong with his weapon."

"I heard. I'll deal with it; you don't need to accompany me," Zac said.

"I'll arrange everything with the Echelon Class, then," Pika said and hurried away.

The world darkened and time slowed to a crawl as Zac activated [Abyssal Drive], careful not to impact the students and teacher with its domain. It wasn't difficult finding the Sword Plateau despite not knowing the layout. It resembled a large sparring platform in the woods behind the main building. Three array pillars surrounded it, each emitting sharp auras.

It was a training array that could conjure large numbers of flying swords that would attack anyone atop the platform. You could meet the onslaught alone or in the group, and you could train anything from battle technique to evasion within. Since the arrays were made based on the Dao of Swords, cultivators could also search for inspiration in the heat of battle.

Right now, the array wasn't running, and the area would have felt abandoned if not for the young man sitting atop one of the pillars with a shortsword in his lap. Zac felt a twang in his heart as he saw the familiar features. He didn't know why he felt the need to see the young swordsman, but he knew better than carrying this knot when entering seclusion. He might be overprepared for his upcoming breakthrough, but that didn't mean it would be easy or fast. This time, he didn't have the Perennial Vastness to help out.

There were also troubling reports of Max talking with the sword when he thought no one was looking. There were no signs of mental issues, but the doctors felt it possible something went wrong because of the rare resources that went into Max's awakening. That splinters of his previous soul were lodged in the depth of his aperture, causing a mental illness resembling schizophrenia.

Seeing Max this close up, Zac had another theory. The easiest way to uncover the truth was to apply some pressure. Zac shot right for the boy, only returning to his corporeal form at the last second. Murderous intent covered the plateau as [Love's Bond] descended toward the boy's head in a brutal arc.

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Max sat in silence, feeling the buffeting of [Second Wind] against his mind. It helped calm his nerves. He didn't know why he'd been so on edge today. He'd heard the whispers among the custodians. Something had gone wrong with the war. However, those matters felt distant and abstract. It wasn't the source of his unease.

He sometimes missed the days before the clouds in his mind parted. It was only him and his companion, free from any errant thoughts or troubling matters. Every day, he learned something new, and the joy of discovery had started to turn into a suffocating pressure. The world was growing too fast. He didn't even know himself, so taking it all in was becoming too much.

These escapes into the wilderness, where it was only him and the Dao, were the only thing that kept it from spilling over. Max smiled as [Second Wind] incorporated another sliver from the pillar. At least he wouldn't be alone forever.

The tranquility was broken by a roiling wave of deadly peril. Max gaped in fear upon seeing a terrifying man appear before him, reeking such bloodlust the ichor in his veins froze over. Yet Max's arm moved on instinct like he'd been in this situation a thousand times before. The shortsword rose to meet the descending edge. More than ever, [Second Wind] felt like an extended part of him.

Reacting in time wasn't enough. Instructor Dwayne would have shaken his head, complaining about form without purpose. How could you bring out your true strength when your heart was in turmoil?

Rationally understanding the problem didn't magically solve it. The immense force within the axe was like a collapsing mountain, and Max felt like every bone in his body would break as he was thrown off the pillar and into the arena. The pain helped dispel all errant thoughts, at least, allowing the training to kick in. Max rolled to his feet, his sword held in a defensive position as he found his bearings.

His attacker was already standing before him, his features hidden by a cloak and a haze of Death. Powerful, incredibly powerful. Max listened for the footsteps of guards running over, but the forest was deathly silent. It was as though the arena had been cut off from the world and his chances at survival with it.

"Who—"

His question was answered with more violence. The gleaming axehead moved in for the kill, the intent imbued in the strike far surpassing the murderous air of the visiting veterans. Yet the sharper the Killing Intent levied against him, the louder the swordhymns grew in his ears. Max followed its urgings, meeting the overbearing attack with a glancing deflection that allowed him to move within his larger opponent's reach.

Where a fist was waiting.

Max saw his impending doom, yet his body wasn't ready to give in. A narrow dodge reset the battlefield, yet the pressure immediately returned. Max desperately endured, but he felt his grip on reality slipping. The swordhymns were joined by roars and flashes of unfamiliar scenes of foreign lands. Of furious struggle, of twisted faces glaring at him from the other side of a set of clashing weapons. [Second Wind] felt burning hot in his hands, a fire that gave him the courage to fight back against this terrifying opponent. Dreams and reality converged as Max followed the call as though possessed.

Yet it wasn't enough. Whether real or fake, Max was being suffocated as he steadily lost ground. Max could as well have been fighting ten people from how the axe seemed to be everywhere at once. Even then, his mind settled as he was pushed closer to the inevitable end. Now that a few seconds had passed, Max understood the truth. If this man wanted him dead, he'd be dead after the first exchange.

This was a test.

"Not bad," the man said when Max finally couldn't resist and removed the cowl hiding his features.

The previously calmed heart threatened to jump out of Max's mouth as he stared into the pitch-black eyes of the warrior. They felt like the true expression of Death. The true face of the very land he stood on.

He was such an idiot! Why didn't he realize sooner?

"H—hello, Emperor!"

Max had assumed it was another veteran Headmistress Pika had brought to share their experiences and insights with the students. Maybe he'd seen Max sitting atop the pillar and decided to test him out. To think it was Arcaz Umbri'Zi, the ruler of the whole Empire!

The realization brought a new dimension to the questions he'd grappled with over the past months. Of the inexplicable treatment he enjoyed. He was no slouch, and he did work hard on his swordplay. But he couldn't hold a candle to the talents of the Echelon Classes. So why the special treatment? And what about the other odd things he'd noticed?

Was he really someone special in his past life?

"Do you know me?" Emperor Umbri'Zi asked as his axe transformed into a beautiful necklace.

"Uh," Max hesitated, his soul trembling under the intense stare. Was it a test? "N—no. I don't remember anything from my past life. But there's only one person with your eyes. Th—there's a painting of you in the commissary."

"Hm," the Emperor nodded, his expression growing distant.

Max couldn't bear the silence or the questions rattling in his mind.

"Can—can I ask who I was before I died?" Max asked.

"You should have been given the report."

All reanimated citizens were given a file on their old life, containing a brief description of their past selves. It was up to them whether they read the report or not and whether they wanted to apply to meet their predecessor's family. The situation with the Echelon Class seemed different, but Max was normal in this regard.

Of course, he'd looked. Who wouldn't be curious about their background? Max also believed it held the answers he sought about [Second Wind]. Why did he awaken with a weapon already bonded with his soul? However, the short life story in the file had left Max sorely disappointed.

"It doesn't make sense," Max pressed. "According to the report, I was a nobody. So why do I retain more of my cultivation than the others? Why do I have access to better resources? Is the report fake? Who am I?"

Emperor Umbri'Zi didn't immediately answer. Eventually, he sighed and shook his head. "A nobody? He had friends, family. Companions who trusted their backs to him. He was hard-working. He had aspirations. He wasn't a nobody. His journey simply ended early. That doesn't mean he didn't leave a mark or matter."

"Then… it's true?" Max said, his eyes glazing over as he felt the fantasies he'd built come crumbling down.

He'd often daydreamed his differences came from a hidden identity. Maybe he was the son of one of the Empire's generals. The truth of his origin was obscured to protect him, and he was left [Second Wind] as a safeguard. One day, they'd step through the gates of the Blackwood College and bring him home.

It was all nonsense.

The Emperor shook his head, and Max gasped as he felt [Second Wind] fly out of his hand.

"I understand things don't make sense right now. The best explanation I can give is that Karma connects us. I was the one who gave you this sword when you were a human child who hadn't stepped onto the road of cultivation. It was a chance encounter, and I didn't see you again until the moment you fell in battle. You died the day I returned."

The sword returned to Max's side, and he breathed out as he felt whole again. Yet he didn't know what to think. His treatment was simply the result of a coincidence? A simple word from the Emperor, and he could enjoy unearned benefits. However, the next words from the Emperor blew the gloom away.

"Are you willing to take me as your master? You'd become my second disciple after Emily Larkin."

"Disciple?" Max's eyes lit up before a cloud of hesitation put a lid on the excitement. He glanced at the necklace around the Emperor's neck. "Would I have to…?"

"You don't need to switch to an axe," the Emperor laughed. "I'm walking the path of conflict. The axe is how I understand this Dao. There is nothing preventing you from doing the same with the sword. Besides, I'm pretty hands-off. I won't interfere with what direction you take."

What else were there to say?

"I'm willing!"

Comments

Aris T.

Tftc!

Sirloki

Woot!

Timothy Dana

What happened with the remnants the System showed to Zac in the chapter before last ? Did Zac take them?

Bender

Probably the Chapter Heads mentioned in previous chapter.

Nicolas Coons

Was that whole Pope conflict contained in the previous chapters non-Zack narration and the first few paragraphs of this one? Seems rather sudden for something so important...

M💬

I had a feeling he would be the second disciple he had excited for his character

Mateo Lopez

I need more! Ugh Also I didn’t expect this! Happy to see the kid continue his journey in some form.

Jake

Epic one chapter side note/ spin off adding depth !

Stefan Muntean

The first moment it started with Max the reverend I was thinking about the boy Zac gave his sword and who died later.

Anonymous

Oh another disciple how exciting

Lex Luther S

Yooooo lit as fuck man. I'm betting 10 buckaroos on Max gaining entry into the sword emperor inheritance; the Dao repository has gone unused for so long and this will be a step in solving that. But damn man, to think 3 field armies died; the kan'tanu pope is insane. As for those monarchs that received injuries, hopefully whatever zac has stored in the ruins will be able to heal them and then some because it's truly not looking great and hopefully it was Ultimate peak that was one of the injured ones instead of the dead ones

Tim Johnson

they were posted to the middle d grade hegemon merit shop. Zac would need to advance to be able to purchase them.

Anonymous

not yet, needs to set up a fall guy (Tsurans is my guess) before he activates the atavism and sacrifice(to bring the bell/Vilari back)

TorHKU

I really like the view of Zac from the second half. This unstoppable, unknowable, inscrutable man with unbreakable power and mysterious means (the telekinesis, the necklace). We know he's a dork with an axe, and we know his tricks from the inside, but it's so cool to see the thousand+ chapters of dork coalesce into a glorious whole wrapped in mystery.

Tyler

The last chapter talks about the Chapter Heads just being bait to damage the front lines until the Lord of the Kan'Tanu came to battle.

Jamarr

This the second mention of a battle with some "Pope" and it feels like there's a chapter missing. Last we saw of Zac he was reading the cursed book and finishing his constitution. Then we get an offhand mention in the chapter with Levara and now everyone knows.

SandreX

Nah remember everfast monarch run off on emergency mission? I think that what built it up

Henry Wartemberg

Yay to Galau and buffing up of the Atwood Empire. It’s the only part of the story I wish there was more opportunity to focus on.

Anonymous

Mentioning the Pope felt kind of offhand for such a large event. It makes sense that information is limited since everyone died, but having a glimose of it through a disposable character like the Everfast Monarch ascending would have been cool. I'm glad that more is happening with Max. I always thought he'd be more important than a noteworthy death, but to think he'd be a revenant! Awesome callback, I'm excited for more.

Sprightly Ebbie

Second Disciple? My how Zac has grown from the man that could barely kill the naked dog thingy in the beginning of the story to now having 2 disciples. I mean technically Emily kinda just claimed it lol

Minh Nguyen

Meanwhile in Nevermore. Jake: Learn all about curses and plagues you want. Feed the growing hatred inside of you, it’ll make you stronger! Feel free to kill as much as you want 👍

Han Pol

Hmm I mean okay, but personally I don't like .."it's karma" as a reason too much if he goes around recrouting disciplines I hope one of the people from the PV get's a slot as well. Maybe also a spot in the inheritance from Brasla.

AnEggMaw

Love when we get POV swaps to see Zac be badass

Andrew

Thank you!

Jason Hatter

Isn't that the one Thea has? I thought that only one could have it until they died?

Anonymous

Such a touching chapter!!! Looking forward to more of Max and [Second Wind]!

Lex Luther S

Thea was the first recipient of the sword emperor but because of zacs moms shenanigans, the system declared Thea "dead" and to prove that point, the sword emperor inheritance had opened back up. It's why zac thinks she's dead despite her still being alive.

Nathaniel Green

Nah Zac was pretty hands on with Emily. He taught her the basics of how to fight, he got her race upgraded before she became a cultivator, he prepared so many lifesaving treasures for her that her master at the big axe collosseum had to force her to leave them behind in order for her to get stronger. He analyzes flaws in her techniques ever since F grade. Power leveled her closing incursions. Hes not much of a teaching master but she definitely has enjoyed huge benefits of being his disciple.

Scott Mingo

So the sword took in a piece of the guy's soul when he died, and it's consuming sword energy to create a tool spirit, thus giving the original soul a second wind?

Iron Knight

GOOD. this is Honor

Zachary Blevins

I picked up a stone and polished it until it shined I’m glad to see this character come back

Tibstrike

That's the point Jamarr. It's something that happened since then

Salvo (edited)

Comment edits

2024-01-09 22:05:41 Do we know if Max can even enter the dao repository? I have yet to get a “reverent start as lvl 1 f grade”. Most were E grade when they died so I assumed he was when he woke: excluding home from the dao repository. Still, he is the dao inspiration of death and war. So I’m glad he’s a part in this is being developed.
2024-01-09 21:52:17 Do we know if Max can even enter the dao repository? I have yet to get a “reverent start as lvl 1 f grade”. Most were E grade when they died so I assumed he was when he woke: excluding him from the dao repository. Still, he is the dao inspiration of death and war. So I’m glad he’s a part in this development. I think Max is going to be key to the ‘life through death’ Dao mantra Zac first started with. Even better is the Earth belief that even in death there is hope for a new beginning.

Do we know if Max can even enter the dao repository? I have yet to get a “reverent start as lvl 1 f grade”. Most were E grade when they died so I assumed he was when he woke: excluding him from the dao repository. Still, he is the dao inspiration of death and war. So I’m glad he’s a part in this development. I think Max is going to be key to the ‘life through death’ Dao mantra Zac first started with. Even better is the Earth belief that even in death there is hope for a new beginning.

Will Banning

Can someone remind me who Max was before he was a revenant? And in what arc Zac gave him the sword?

Will Banning

Pretty sure that's on the to-do list. But it's a major event. Gotta have a little bit of filler and side character growth before focusing purely on Zac again.

Hartmann

Max in his dreamer form was first introduced in the chapter in which Zac visited the Thayer Consortium after escaping the Orom World. Max played around with some friends and Zac appreciated his determination with the sword. Therefore he gifted him a Spirit Tool short sword.

Henry Wartemberg

Sounds like you’ve hit the nail. It would certainly make sense why he would take the guy as a disciple then. Life / Death. Both Taboo spirit tools. Probably able to help out with Soul cultivation in some way

KollegvomMirgan

Loved this chapter! Can't wait to see the story of Max unfold. I was really heartbroken when he died, although he really was a nobody 😅

Malakal

It was when he returned from the orom world and he was walking around Port Atwood, there was a boy practicing sword swings.

Will Banning

Oh that's so much more recent that I thought. I might've skimmed that chapter. Thank you!

Blayne Allsen

I'm glad to see Max is back and getting a better focus in the story! I really like that Zac is helping him out after giving him that sword as a kid, and him dying right as Zac returned felt like Max's story was cut short. I'm also excited to see what skills he has, [Second Wind] sounds cool!

StuBee3

Because of what Leandra did, the system thinks Thea is dead

StuBee3

TFTC 😎

Mack

To be fair, he initially saw uniqueness in the human boy. That’s why he gave him the sword. It’s not ‘just’ Karma even if something similar forged a later connection.

Telewyn

Its Fate too. Makes me wonder what Max’ luck score is.

Jeffrey Worrall

Was thinking the same thing, he could also get the undying fiend inheritance but sword emperor is a better fit. Zac really needs to fill those other slots, especially the crafting inheritance.

Jeffrey Worrall

I like the term, the Kan Tanu are a cult, having a religious name/rank for their head honcho makes sense to me

Lex Luther S

This was after zac came back from thr Orom world and his current world view is far larger so to be willing to take max as his disciple shows that he has something unique about him. My guess is his potential with the sword is off the charts and with zacs knowledge and treasures as a foundation, he'll grow to be a next generation powerhouse of the Atwood empire, especially if he gets access to one of tbe inheritances, either sword emperor or Undying fiend.

Lex Luther S

If I'm not mistaken, the sword was already a weapon with a took spirit, I'd have to go read the ch again when I've the chance but it's an interesting thought if this is the case.

Lex Luther S

I think it was mentioned they drop a grade when awakened unless it's like Bojes' situation where they basically converted him. Also depends on the resources and how skilled the lich working on the corpse is. But Max should be F grade though I imagine we'll learn of the coming interactions between them

Lex Luther S

Ohhh, I forgot about the Undying fiend inheritance. Hmmmm, it could go either way, but I agree the sword emperor inheritance just fits to well for max. Now we can only hope Irie(think that was his name lol) won't take issue with an undead taking his trial

Lex Luther S

"Hm," the Emperor nodded, his expression growing distant. This just fits that "mysterious master" persona too well man😂😂

Lex Luther S

It was mentioned the ch before zacs body tempering breakthrough that the kan'tanu were pushing back hard against the alliance trying to take advantage of the centurion spear and this likely took place a while after the spears fallout.

Salvo

Actually, I think ‘dao companion’ is better. The image of him dying, the weight of war, that all his people can and will die… was the dao inspiration Zac gained. So, Zac gained from his journey and the karma debt was held in the sword. A big deal to me is Zac was in his human half in the scene, so Max actually can confirm Zac and Arcaz are still connected.

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

Bilal Williams

Finally full circle. I love it. I was hoping for more of a parent relationship like Vilari though. I wonder how many revenants Zac is making vs his liches nowadays with all the bodies that have to be available from the war. The undead population has to be beginning to eclipse the living.

ouroboros

Will I have to use the 🪓? Zac; Have you heard of glaives? They have axe blades on the side and a sword blade on the end, you'll do fine!

SandreX

I think his blood is still catalyst? Well at least all those that has blackwood surname are his children, but Vilari is still best daughter.

Stefan Muntean

If he writes an entire chapter on how Galau works on areys there will be people screaming he is wasting our time lol

Chemistrywarrior

Why do I have the feeling this is the Set up for the big Thea is alive reveal 😂 Zac brings max to the inheritance because it's 10+ years and wonder it's still closed 😱

Beezy

was really gutted when the kid died in the war as i had high hopes for his story. this has got me super excited again, especially if [Second Wind] works like i think and Max gets a tool spirit like Thea of the dreamer soul. Gonna be a cool af disciple in a little while, can’t wait to see it

TSMS

When Leandra set Thea free, she told her that the inheritance was reopened: “Your understanding is flawed,” Leandra said without raising a brow. “The Heavens struck you down; you died as far as the System is concerned. It is the same for that little unstable Tool Spirit; it reopened your inheritance the day we left Earth. For them, you are well and truly dead.” - Book 7, Chapter 83

Chemistrywarrior

It's been a while since I've read that. Guess I just wanted to believe that this chapter was more than some uncessary talk with a guy called Max 😂. Or shall it represent that Zac still is the very humble guy 😂

TSMS

I wish there was a way to always tell, which persona of Zac we are currently following. In this chapter we are about 10 paragraphs in before we know we are following his draugr form. In this chapter it's not really important, but especially when Zac's human half was on the lightning throne and the draugr half in the Ensolus ruins, we switched perspectives every few paragraphs and it was quite confusing. Is there a specific reason TFD doesn't use "Arcaz" when following the pov of Zac's draugr side? Alternatively something like "In his draugr body, Zac stepped of the platform" in the beginning of the chapter could also work. Otherwise the reader deals with Schrödinger's Zac until he interacts with other people or the environment.

Anonymous

Is Echelon class something new? I’m assuming it’s just the elite young revenants/humans?

Anonymous

The rollercoaster ride of this kid's arc, culminating in being Zac's first undead disciple? Love every bit of that

Anonymous

Oh man, please give us a conversation down the line where Emily tells Max what Zac was like during Earth's transition into the system, back during the Post-apocalypse days. Closing incursions and sitting atop The Ladder. There's narrative meat on that bone I'd love to taste.

Jonas Lemke

That's fair and I have wondered this myself. I'm guessing writing it this way reinforces that it's just Zac at the end of the day. If the bodies really are Entangled than whose to say that they couldn't switch places at will one day? Maybe when his spy core gets upgraded? I think this designation is meant to express that it truly does not matter what Zac is in that situation until he is observed

TSMS

I understand that it's important for the reader to know, that Zac and Arcaz are only one person that happens to occupy two bodies simultaneously. But I think, if we get to follow only one half of Zac at a time, we should also be aware which half it is. I'm just reminded of "The Neverending Story" by Michael Ende. Part of the book takes place in the 'real world' and another part in 'Fantastica' and the protagonist can interact with both. The version of the book I had was printed in two different colors to indicate, where any given scene took place. I don't think this would make sense here - even if it was supported by Patreon - but some indicator could be nice. Maybe italicize "Zac" and "Arcaz" when speaking about Zac acts in one of his physical bodies and don't italicize "Zac" when it's his inner thoughts.

-Sanguine-

Couple things you need to fix here starting with the super confusing perspective switches. Zac’s draugr side needs to be pointed out a bit more strongly it’s quite difficult to understand which POV we are following until a few pages of context clues in. Also what is a pope? Did you skip a chapter you meant to write or something?

Anonymous

The pope refers to the really strong c-grade "chapter head" mentioned in the previous chapter.

CrypticAnon

I still remember when zac was killing the undead in the tower of eternity. They were basically babies this whole time.

Robert Rosenthal

I think people have it right the pope refers to the led kantanu the previous seen was one of the senior subordinates don’t know why the catholic title is used here. I am curious is evening tide asura part of this conflict we have not heard from him in a while he would seem like one of the strongest opposition for the kantanu if he wants to fight