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Changing Lane (Patreon)

Published:
2022-03-20 20:46:39
Imported:
2023-12
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Here is one from an idea from Erin.  She also came up with the name when I sent her the draft, and so I made the adjustments.  Please give me some feedback on this story.

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Sammy C

It's interesting that you chose to tell the story from the point of view of the trucker instead of Lane/Lana. So much of Lana's emergence/transition remains a mystery. It's as if we're trying to envison an entire room by looking through a keyhole. Perhaps you might want to enter the room itself...but I'm okay with these glimpses you prefer to offer the reader. Lana seems like a character worth another short story at a further stage in her metamorphosis.

maryannepeters

Hi John. Yes, I was telling this story in snatches of time - his perception of the changes taking place, and his growing adoration. I call it "the besotted observer" POV. I am glad that you have a view of Lana as a character from my paucity of words, but I think that she is interesting - brought up on a farm she is strong enough to take on her parents and her school, after a little encouragement from her driver.