Awkward Inception: early archival records of Riptoryx’s crude old “Super Girl” comic (Patreon)

Back in the late 1990s, one of my first contributions to the great pool of Internet perversion was an incomplete series of illustrations I uploaded to a “Weight Gain Illustrated” Yahoo group managed by Kastemel. Vaguely styled as a tongue-in-cheek parody of super hero aesthetics, in practice this “Super Girl” comic (with the quotation marks obligatory) was a small collection of crudely drawn images into which I attempted to dump a whole bunch of my related kinky interests; one big, messy melting pot of perversion. As with its college setting, the roommate relationship, and various other elements, the super hero styling was just a foil to facilitate playing up various weight-related tropes: disempowerment, humiliation, role reversal, etc. I mean, the titular character’s only clearly defined “power” was a super-human ability to lose weight quickly and effortlessly, which she used to lead a carelessly lazy and over indulgent lifestyle in between occasional “hyper exercise” sessions to get herself rapidly fit and trim again for whatever the occasion may be. Obviously, this silly contrivance was just a domino that I erected with the intention of later knocking it over, to the clear detriment of a now decidedly-less-than-“super” girl.

While the old Yahoo group where I first posted my “Super Girl” comic stuff became a functionally dead relic many years ago, the illustrations still can be found stashed on my DeviantArt page. I imagine a lot of you have encountered them there already at one time or another. 

What you may not know, however, is that those illustrations on my DeviantArt page—crude as they may be—are actually the second (and “improved,” if you can believe it!) iteration of my “Super Girl” sketches. There was an even earlier version, clumsily scribbled on binder paper purely for my own enjoyment in a pre-Internet adolescence. With apologies for the poor craftsmanship and poor scanning (I’ve tried to clean up the images a bit, but the scans were done at least 15 years ago using less than great equipment), attached you’ll find the fourteen original “Super Girl” pages. While there is some overlap (and inconsistency) with the later versions on DeviantArt, these “originals” differ in that they eschew the college environment set up and instead cover slightly more of the subsequent action in the Rio de Janeiro setting (corresponding to items 10 through 39 in the plot summary list below).  

While at one point I imagined that I would re-illustrate all those original pages and more, for various reasons—notably including my dearth of drawing talent as well as the amount of time it would require for me to messy scribble something even of that dubious quality—I never fished the “comic.” There was never much of a “plot,” but the general course of events I envisioned within the existing comic (original and revised) went roughly as follows:

• 1. A set of establishing scenes of Jennifer/”Super Girl” at college. She’s a shapely long-haired brunette, hiding faintly defined six-pack abs under a proportionately large bust. She bids farewell to her long-distance boyfriend as he leaves after a brief visit; we see Jennifer’s chunky, slightly frumpy roommate, Deb, seethe with growing jealousy and frustration over Jennifer’s unfair ability to maintain a trim figure, good looks, popularity, etc. despite her ridiculously casual attitude toward diet, exercise, and general effort.
• 2. Jennifer spends a week or two cramming for exams in courses she’s slacked on for most of the semester, and crams her face with junk food all the while, as is her normal habit. Exams finished, Jennifer discovers the extended bout of stress eating has caused her gain a bit of weight. It’s a modest amount in the big picture but over the short time span it actually reflects a quite rapid gain, well in excess of just a typical freshman 15 dynamic. 
• 3. Bemused but nonchalant, Jennifer heads off to the gym and, after about an hour of light exercise, manages to lose all the extra weight and come back looking in prime shape. 
• 4. Meanwhile, Jennifer’s roommate sees Jennifer on her way to the gym, notices that the usually-flawless Jennifer does seem to look a little bit plumper, and then also comes across the evidence of Jennifer’s pig-out sessions in their dorm room. Jennifer’s roommate hatches a plan to start sabotaging Jennifer’s eating habits.
• 5. Soon after wrapping up her exercise, and just as the semester break is about to begin, Jennifer gets an alert that her ridiculously named villain nemesis, Dastardly Mann, is up to no good at deserted location, so she changes into her superhero identity and goes to confront him.
• 6. “Super Girl” finds Dastardly Man and his sidekick/henchman (“Bob”) at the expected location. The framing and lighting are such that we never get a clear view of the face of Dastardly Mann or his sidekick.
• 7. But this was a trap; Dastardly Mann was waiting for “Super Girl” and before she can escape, he zaps her with a strange ray gun that causes her to gain a huge amount of weight almost instantly. (Or, in the original version, there’s some sort of gas in the air that triggers this same effect.) “Super Girl” is spared further fattening only by chance when costume belt explodes off her fattened waist and knocks the ray gun from Dastardly Mann’s hand, damaging the crystal inside. 
• 8. Dastardly Mann briefly taunts the now massively obese, disoriented, and nearly helpless “Super Girl” before explaining that he’s moving on to Rio de Janeiro to do more evil deeds. 
• 9. Left alone, “Super Girl” eventually manages to pull herself together enough to start doing some clumsy exercise routines. Using her “hyper exercise” powers, she’s soon able to get herself back into reasonable shape. Losing the last few pounds proves to be oddly challenging so in the interest of time Jennifer decides to call it “good enough” for the moment. Then she books a ticket to Rio to chase after Dastardly Mann.
• 10. In Rio, Dastardly Mann and his sidekick are lounging at a beachside hotel, when the pair spot Jennifer patrolling the beach nearby, surely looking for clues. Jennifer is in a skimpy bikini—so as to better blend in with frolicking tourists—and the sidekick comments approvingly on figure. She’s a bit chubby but at least the extra weight is (mostly) in the “right places.” Both Dastardly Mann and his sidekick are a bit surprised that she managed to lose all that weight so fast. Dastardly Mann remarks that they will have to find another way to slow her down a bit more.  
• 11. Meanwhile, on a whim, Jennifer lets herself get roped into an informal, impromptu “bikini contest” being hosted on the beach by a small publicity group (probably a YouTube streaming influencer if were to redo this today) and energy drink brand. But Jennifer is surprised when she not only doesn’t win but doesn’t even score in the upper ranges. Incensed, Jennifer’s self-assurance gets the better of her. She stomps across the raised platform and complains about the “unfairness” to the organizers, but they only respond with mocking derision: did she really expect to get good marks with THAT (still slightly pudgy) physique? Some of the other competing girls overhear and join in the teasing. 
• 12. Embarrassed, Jennifer slinks away from the stage and seeks to soothe her bruised ego with a big order of burgers and a shake at a nearby fast-food joint. She resolves to spend some time at her hotel gym tomorrow working off the rest of this pudge, but in the meanwhile, she rationalizes in typical Jennifer fashion, she might as well enjoy it. 
• 13. In a twist, it turns out Dastardly Mann somehow snuck down to that very fast-food joint and disguised himself as one of its employees. While packaging up Jennifer’s order he empties the contents of a mysterious vial into her milkshake.
• 14. Later, Jennifer is back in her hotel room, soaking in a bubble bath and polishing off the last bits of her burger binge, including the shake. Despite the earlier embarrassment, she’s very much enjoying the luxurious overindulgence. 
• 15. At the same time, Dastardly Mann and his sidekick are back lounging poolside at their own hotel. Dastardly Mann further explains his plan. The substance he added to her milkshake will combine with the lingering effects of the ray (or gas) and produce a reaction in “Super Girl’s” system that will cause her to gain weight at a rate greatly accelerated from normal but no so fast as to be immediately obvious. Further, this weight should prove much more difficult for her to lose as long as the dosage remains in effect.
• 16. Jennifer goes to bed. The next day she dons a jeans and t-shirt outfit to patrol for Dastardly Mann again, this time more along the roadside areas. The jeans are uncomfortably snug fit, though—she can barely even get them zipped up. She muses that all that junk food must’ve been crazy fattening. 
• 17. Several hours and a couple iced mocha slushes later, Jennifer still hasn’t found any good leads on Dastardly Mann and she’s getting frustrated. While pondering her next move, the button on her straining jeans finally pops loose, her pudgy tummy instantly forcing the zipper fly down an inch. Chagrined, this convinces Jennifer to give up the hunt for the day and go the gym like she promised herself she would. 
• 18. Back at the hotel, Jennifer changes into her workout gear as planned. She’s moderately disgusted to see how chunky she looks in her spandex gym attire—the outright really highlights the plump little belly she’s gotten. 
• 19. At the gym, Jennifer is disconcerted by how much more difficult her various exercise routines are than she expected—she’s getting out of breath more quickly and she can’t lift as much as she did on the weights as recently as a few days ago. Worse, after several hours of effort, we see Jennifer showering off, dismayed to find no noticeable improvement in her figure. She’s still soft, with a pudgy little belly. She starts to worry something more sinister is going on.
• 20. That evening we see Jennifer again, flopped on the sofa in her hotel room, clad only in ill-fitting underwear, fretting about her situation. She’s convinced herself that whatever’s going on with her weight and diminished powers has to be tied to the ray (gas) Dastardly Mann used on her. This makes it all the more urgent that she catch him ASAP. And until she does, she chides herself, she’s going to have to be extra careful about what she eats or else she could wind up even chunkier.
• 21. Eight hours, a light dinner, and a breakfast shake later we see Jennifer again, gazing at her reflection in a mirror. She’s clad only in an awkwardly undersized bra and panty set. She’s clearly gained a bit more weight just since last night. It’s particularly evident in her now prominent potbelly and flabby buns. Jennifer moans about how bad this is getting and worries how much fatter she’s going to get. She also frets about how she’s going to be able to catch Dastardly Mann when she can’t even fit into her clothes. None of the outfits she brought with her decently wearable anymore.
• 22. Desperate, Jennifer stuffs herself into the only thing in her travel wardrobe that’s even remotely wearable—a halter top and shorts combo, with the shorts now riding up enough to leave the bottom of her doughy behind hanging out—and heads over to a plus-size store. Inwardly, Jennifer whines to herself about how demeaning it feels to shop in such a place. The store clerk recommends various dresses to “accommodate” her figure but she’s not impressed. 
• 23. The clerk then recommends girdles and shapewear as a solution. First the clerk helps Jennifer into an extremely constraining full torso girdle. While cinching it up as tight as humanly possible does make her look almost kinda thin again it’s also so restrictive that she can barely breathe. 
• 24. Back at her hotel room, we see Jennifer has opted to go with Spanx-like shapewear instead of the girdle. She’s also bought larger and more modest clothing, though it’s decidedly less fashionable than her normal attire and tongue-in-cheek self-derogatory. A frumpy (if snug) t-shirt stenciled with “I’m not FAT I’m FLUFFY” and a pair of polyester cuffed shorts. She’s also changed her hairstyle into a more up-do and chin-length fringe. Overall, the effect of the shapewear is less than stellar. While it does somewhat “compress” her figure, it doesn’t so much make look thinner as just less…bouncy. She still looks “round as hell,” in her own words. 
• 25. Thus re-clothed, Jennifer heads out to look for Dastardly Mann again—this time checking the hotels themselves rather than the beach or beach-side venues.  Despite being at least roughly the right size, the new clothes are still proving troublesome. Jennifer finds the shorts are constantly giving her wedgies. She grumbles how clothes were never such a problem when she was thin.
• 26. But, finally, she has a stroke of luck—the first hotel she visits turns up a clue. She finds a note from Dastardly Mann himself, left for her. The note mocks her uncontrolled weight gain—clearly he knows what’s going on—and tells her if she ever wants to get her figure back she’ll have to come look for him at an abandoned warehouse on the waterfront. 
• 27. Jennifer quickly gets herself over the waterfront and finds the abandoned warehouse. She doesn’t change into her “Super Girl” costume—it’s really not built to accommodate her current shape anyway—but she does at least strap on her “Super Girl” belt—now sitting quite a bit higher around her thickened waist. 
• 28. Once inside the warehouse, Jennifer discovers the place has been converted into a maze of silly little obstacles. First she has to crawl through a narrow duct. She makes it through, but between her chunked-up figure and the restrictive shapewear she’s stuffed herself into, by the time she pops out the other end five minutes later she’s a sweaty, winded mess and needs to catch her breath. Frustrated, Jennifer decides the only way to make it through this maze is strip off the shapewear so she can at least get a proper breath. Of course, removing the shapewear leaves her fully pooched out and jiggly again. She’s now “going commando” in the shorts.  
• 29. Next she comes across a room with only a long, very narrow (1-2 feet) corridor “crack” through which she will have to squeeze and shimmy while standing. Gamely, she shoves herself into the crack and starts squirming through, but it’s a very tight fit. She’s constantly in danger of getting stuck and her t-shirt keeps riding up from the friction, leaving her soft belly and love handles exposed and smooshing up against the corridor walls. 
• 30. Jennifer eventually manages to squirm through the narrow corridor, though once again the effort leaves her fatigued. She emerges in a small room with a bench, on which she sits to recover her energy. While there, she mopes about how out of shape she feels and notes that Dastardly Mann certainly seems to be using her weight problem to his advantage. Plus she’s already feeling hungry, having had nothing to eat since that chintzy breakfast shake. 
• 31. Rested, she gets up to continue the search but finds that her shorts have become stuck to the bench—there must have been some sort of glue on the seat! She manages to tear herself free but in the process the bottom is completely ripped out of her shorts, leaving her chunky butt now totally naked and exposed through the tatted fabric. Her shirt isn’t nearly long enough to provide alternative cover. She grumbles how this might not have been quite so bad if she still had her normal figure…
• 32. In the next room Jennifer finds a bikini set and bigger t-shirt lying on a table. She notes this is suspiciously convenient but after carefully inspecting the garments she decides it seems safe enough to put them on. The bikini bottoms are a bit skimpy but it’s better than leaving her bare butt hanging out. The t-shirt fits a little better than the one she was wearing, but the main advantage of both the new bikini and the t-shirt are that they both seem to be heavily elasticated. She keeps her costume belt, though it looks pretty silly pinched around her plump middle in this outfit.
• 33. We then see a close circuit monitor image of Jennifer changing into the new attire, while Dastardly Mann and his sidekick watch. The sidekick questions whether this is actually the same girl they spied on at the beach earlier—she’s porked up so much since then it seems implausible. Dastardly Mann confirms it’s the same girl and explains the clothes—they’re another trap designed to exploit her increasingly self-conscious sensibilities. But the “trick” is pretty modest compared to everything else so far. Once soaked with the water the bikini will disintegrate and the t-shirt will shrink in size dramatically, leaving her effectively even more awkwardly vulnerable and exposed than if she were merely nude. 
• 34. Jennifer moves on to the next room, which contains a refrigerator. She sarcastically quips how this seems anything but subtle. No way is going to eat anything in there! Just then the door she came through slams shut and locks. She’s trapped—there’s no way out of the room. 
• 35. Seeing the obvious set up for what it is, Jennifer is even more determined not to open the fridge. But her stomach starts growling. Time passes. She grows hungrier and becomes increasingly bored, unable to find any exits or devise a plan to escape. Finally, she gives in to curiosity and opens the fridge.
• 36. The fridge is stocked to the brim with rich food, desserts, beverages—a veritable feast of tempting comfort food. Confronted with such temptation her willpower crumbles. She decides to have just a little snack.
• 37. We see a monitor view—Dastardly Mann and his sidekick watching remotely again. Dastardly Mann chuckles at the sight of Jennifer raiding the fridge. In contrast to the earlier presentation of Jennifer’s “long struggle” against temptation, he remarks that it’s only been 8 minutes since she was locked in. He’s amused at how easily she gave in and remarks that he’d expected more of a challenge. He’s excited to see how she handles the appetite stimulants laced into all the food. 
• 38. Later, we see Jennifer lying flat on her back, sprawled out on the floor. The fridge door is open, a major portion of its contents demolished. Despite her intention to only have a “snack,” she’s absolutely glutted herself—stuffed so full she’s feeling sick and can barely even move. Her painfully swollen stomach bulges towards the ceiling, an exposed flesh sliver of her lower belly peeping out between the taut, food-stained stretchy fabric of her shirt and the pinching bikini bottoms. Her belt lies undone and discarded nearby. Blearily, Jennifer scolds herself for eating so much. She knows this latest fiasco is sure to make her gain a ton of weight. She’s convinced she can even feel it happening already.
• 39. Across the room, a panel in the floor she never noticed opens. Groaning, Jennifer slowly drags herself into a crawling position and goes to inspect it. 

And that’s as far the combined version of the “original” and later revision spanned. Beyond that, I do recall a few sketchy framework ideas for what might have happened next. 

• 1. After plodding through one or two more “traps,” Jennifer would succeed in obtaining the “antidote” for her condition, but not before getting soaked while in this chubby, overstuffed state—leading to further in-person humiliation by Dastardly Mann and his sidekick. Dastardly Man and his sidekick then make their getaway—again.
• 2. Once obtained, the antidote would work quickly—the added weight would essentially vanish without even the need for her to use “hyper exercise.” Except it wouldn’t ALL vanish. Rather, only the weight that was the direct product of the various rays, gases, chemicals, etc. would be negated. Jennifer would still be left with about 10 or 15 pounds of extra pudge that she’d “earned” entirely through normal means. Still, she’d be relieved.
• 3. In another scene with Dastardly Mann and his sidekick, the sidekick complains that everything was for naught because they let “Super Girl” get the antidote. Dastardly Mann corrects him and says even this was part of the plan. The “antidote” was actually the last part of a complex multi-stage treatment designed to fully and permanently nullify “Super Girl’s” powers. I no longer recall the details but I’d worked out some sort of anagram for all the various crystals, etc. where the letters of their individual gibberish names could be combined and rearranged to form something like “ExSexyNowFlabbyandFat.” Dastardly Mann would reveal this detail to his sidekick as proof the master plan. (Brilliant, right?) 
• 4. Anyway, the end result would be that, unbeknownst to her for now, Jennifer has in fact completely lost her “hyper exercise” power, as well as the less well-defined effortless fashion sense, enhanced strength, speed, agility, etc. that were part of her super hero portfolio. Now she’s just a regular college girl with a serious sweet tooth and a poorly developed willpower/discipline born from a lifetime of super powers making her good looks and general success come so easily.
• 5. The story would continue back at college as Jennifer returns from her “vacation” spent chasing Dastardly Mann. Her roommate Deb, now keyed in to watch for such things, notices that it looks like Jennifer picked up a few more pounds just over the week-long break. The roommate beings implementing her plot to sabotage Jennifer by leaving treats around the dorm room. Meanwhile the roommate also starts making redoubled efforts to lose weight herself.
• 6. “Safe” back at school, Jennifer returns to her usual ways of careless eating, partying, and slacking off. Between those bad habits and the additional machinations of her roommate, Jennifer’s weight starts to climb rapidly.
• 7. When the chub starts getting inconvenient, Jennifer attempts her usual “hyper exercise” trick to lose it but discovers she can’t. Jennifer panics and tries harder and harder, but only succeeds in injuring herself. 
• 8. Laid up with a bad sprain, Jennifer is sidelined from any serious exercise for an extended period. She stresses about her vanished powers and fattening physique, but this only leads to her overeat even more. 
• 9. Jennifer’s stylish fashion sense and popularity fade along her enviable figure. Before long, Jennifer is turning into a frumpy dorm room hermit. Rarely venturing out to socialize, her routine increasingly revolves around little beyond plodding between classes and quickly carrying hefty to-go meals from the campus dining hall back to her dorm room to devour in private. Her trendy wardrobe has been reduced to a limited selection of campus-branded hoodies and sweatpants, tagged with however many Xs she’d gotten up to that month. 
• 10. Meanwhile, roommate Deb has lost a decent bit of weight and has started “borrowing” some of Jennifer’s old, outgrown outfits. Deb’s also gotten even more bold with her sabotaging efforts. No longer just ensuring tempting treats are readily available, she’s taken to sneaking extra butter and “mass gainer” additives into various things when she can. Fattening Jennifer has become an entertaining hobby for her. She takes photos of Jennifer in embarrassing, unflattering situations and shares them online.
• 11. Eventually, Jennifer’s long-distance boyfriend tells her he’s coming for a visit. Jennifer is nervous. She hasn’t fully disclosed to him how much weight she’s piled on since they last saw each other.
• 12. When the boyfriend arrives, it would be revealed to her and the reader (somehow, though I don’t think I ever quite worked out the method) that he is in fact Dastardly Mann. 
• 13. Dastardly Mann would probably do something to humiliate and sexually dominate Jennifer right then and there. At that point the story could have gone different ways. Perhaps the boyfriend/Dastardly Mann then would have dumped Jennifer, revealing that this was all a ridiculously elaborate revenge plot to get back at her for some previous self-centered slight she committed against him or someone else in the past. Or perhaps the story would have progressed in a slightly happier (?) way with the boyfriend/Dastardly Mann further molding a shocked, defeated, and reeling Jennifer into a fully-fledged submissive feedee relationship. 
• 14. There were probably other details and maybe even longer-range plans than that back in the day but that’s about the limit of what I can recall. 

So, what’s the point of sharing all this? Well, partly I think it’s interesting to reflect back on this very early effort and see in it a lot of the same themes and general scenarios that continue to inhabit my creative kinky efforts. It’s easy to spot some common threads between the later (unillustrated) plans for Jennifer/”Super Girl” and what would eventually happen with Kara in “The Slowest Champion: Revisited.” I think there are also similar commonalities between some of the exploitative shenanigans used against Jennifer and what I’m setting up for Miranda Lawson in “Nerf Effect.” But I guess what I want to highlight here most of all is that combining imagery with kinky subversive weight gain storytelling has been an ambition of mine for most of my life. Today, and partly with the help of generous folks like you, I’m getting the chance to explore and share that ambition using better resources than I ever could on my own. That includes resources like commissioned illustrators, so that nobody has to suffer the embarrassment of squinting at my own enthusiastically untalented “sketches.” 

Thanks again, patrons.

-Riptoryx