Dialogue Update: Pages 17-27 (Patreon)

Hellllluuuuuuur friends 💕👹

Got another storyline/dialogue update for ya to feast your eyes on:

Recap: I've been reworking certain dialogue scenes/pages/parts of the story in preparation of the print version of BKI, Volume 1.

The next dialogue update/round of edits I worked on were from Pages 17-27 in Chapter 1. It's been so long since I touched these pages that it felt nostalgic going back through them to update things 😆

For this update, the original pages 17-27 WEREN'T horrible–I just felt they needed a tune up and maybe some reworking of panels/dialogue/sentence flow through the storyline. 

The changes I will be implementing here are as follows:

- General retouching/reworking of most dialogue bubbles & speech bubble positioning

- Reworked some of the dialogue from Pages 17-27 to flow better

- Reworked two of the panels to fit the scene/page better (the panel of Cal stretching on Page 21 & the panel of Norman pointing on Page 24)

- Rewrite the narrative/dialogue on Pages 24 & 25 so that the flow of the story feels better and reads easier.

Lmk what you think! Have a wonderful weekend 💕

-J

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