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This is the last step to finish KameParadise2, Can you read if this lines are correct?

Future Bulma:   Trunks,  my son,  please,  be careful when you travel to the past.

Yamucha:  Th.. tha....That girl is dressed in a sexy bunny costume !

Puar:    You must focus Yamcha-sama !

Bulma Bunny: Remember our deal.

                        If you can put out the fire I'll give you a Puff-puff ♥

Dr.Brief: I'm sure my wife is cheating on me...

Panchy:   My husband has a lot of strange gadgets in the lab. What a mess!

Lunch Blonde: Get out of my way bitches !!!

Chichi Mother: Since Goku died we have very little money...


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glad

They all look good to me

Roxas

For lunch blonde I would say "Get out of my way assholes!"

Daniel Onuoha

All of the lines look correct. 👍👍

Roxas

But overall the lines are correct Yamamoto

Happytimes

They all look fine to me

Silver Tongue

They are fine grammatically. Though personally, I don't think the Trunks and Bulma dialogue flows naturally. Seems a bit like exposition. I'd go with: "Trunks, please be careful when you travel to the past" Yamcha: "S-she's wearing a sexy bunny outfit!"

Fighting Master

Change chi chi lines "we had very little money "

Marcko Resendez

Chichi's line can be changed to "ever since Goku died we haven't had much money" not that the English is wrong. just has a lot more fluidity.

Bullock

I Can't believe is almost done. The hype is killing me :D

Sonyian

It all looks pretty good to me yamamoto-sama!

Brett

Everything looks perfect. No problems at all!

SupaidahMann

What is puff puff? In American English that’s an word used for smoking marijuana. Do you mean her showing a peek of her boobs? If you you can say “you can take a peek ❤️ “

Viken Urnoc

"Future Bulma: Trunks, my son, please be careful when you travel down memory lane." When I watch the TV Special 2 in the original japanese version, Bulma never says "Trunks, my son." Maybe just write "Trunks, please, be careful when you travel down memory lane." "Bulma Bunny: Remember our agreement. If you can put out the fire I'll give you a Puff-puff ♥ " Paf Paf