SE;ki redawn! chapter one page 9 (Patreon)

ah i was trying out new pen settings and i accidentally inked and finished page 9 of chapter one :P lol

now, im not done sketching all of chapter one yet..but i haven't made much progress with that for like a year so maybe i should start inking lol cos i wanna finish this someday.. D:

what do you think?

also can i ask for some feedback, im trying a bit of a different style :D 

less tone but cleaner lines ^^;

how does it look? im not 100% sure..does it look boring? should i make the lines thinner?

here are the other of redrawn chapter one: https://www.patreon.com/posts/se-ki-chapter-1-8184014