What could have been— (Patreon)

The original insult that L gave MC...

It was... not nearly as harsh... 

One of my alpha readers were like: no. that's pathetic. fix.

And that's how MC got eviscerated in broad daylight.

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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically

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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically

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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically

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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically

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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically

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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically

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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically

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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically

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Spoilers for chapter 5 technically

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(One early rough example—and the scene structure of the end was very different at the time!)

#A dispassionate call for Lestrade to do the work required.

"We have a job to do. I require your services, for once. I recommend attempting not to be the reason it fails."

"Mmm. *How* inspiring," they say, meaning little of the words by the tone.

*if (loneWolf)

"Didn't think I'd see the day. The great detective, needing anyone, ever... ${mc_name} ${mc_lastname} asking for my assistance. "Their jaw ticks, and their mouth turns sour. "While telling *me* to be better. The person who can't handle their boredom, laments daily the crimes are too tame, and

*if (cope = "eating")

loses all resolve when there's an appetite.

*elseif (cope = "taking drugs")

drops all sense for their favourite inebriety.

*elseif (cope = "gambling")

ironically has a habit for making the most idiotic bets.

*elseif (cope = "smoking")

chases an ever darkening of their lungs.

*elseif (cope = "inaction")

would win awards for passion for idleness.

*elseif (cope = "berating")

is everyone's *favourite* little personal fault finder.

*elseif (cope = "drinking")

possesses a frankly impressive fondness for inebriety.

*elseif (cope = "taking risks")

possesses a frankly idiotic fondness for risk.

*elseif (cope = "experimenting")

possesses a moronic lust for playing with fire.

What could be more inspiring than that?"


*if (loneWolf) #"That's somewhat fair... well. Let it never be said miracles do not happen."

You give your goodbyes and turn to leave.

"Let me escort you, ${mc_lastname}. The crowds here..."

"I can handle myself."

"I know. *I do*. But why do it? Why take the risk? For my peace of mind, would you let me?"