A Sensual Encounter....or is it? (Patreon)

Version1

Version 2

The lyrics were written via the Greasytales facebook page, the same method used for Calloused Hands and Final Form.

I like the song and I'd like to animate it.  I'm thinking Gooseman and Fernando will sing it, there will be some staring into sunsets, pagan rituals, etc.

I made version 1 first, but I felt I'd set the pitch too high for my voice and it sounds stretched, so I made a second version that's 4 semitones lower.  The second version is twice as long.  

Each one has elements I prefer.  I like how the song sounds 4 semitones lower, but I needed to play the chords in different places on the fret board so the guitar doesn't have the same rising appeal (hard to put in to words, perhaps you can hear what I mean).  Each one has lines of vocals that aren't quite there and would need to be redone.

So I'm wondering which one I should go with.  Which one is better do you think?