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Venelana relationship (Patreon)

Published:
2022-10-04 15:15:09
Imported:
2022-10

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Alright so I posted the chapter right before the lewd on other platforms and I got some very good feedback thats making me question some things. And a lot of the feedback I couldn’t argue with. So my current thought is to remove the lewd, keep it as an omake,  and edit the chapters to reflect this change for a slower way to go about it. After considering it, I didn’t really translate my own thoughts well and it came off as out of character for wilhelm and cheapens his other relationships in hindsight. So, keep everything as is or tweak the chapters to fix a mistake I probably made? In my personal opinion I think I should edit them to better reflect the character, but I want opinions. Overall, not much will change except the lewd not happening.

Comments

Oscar Sampedro Lopez

Personally, it is good as it is since not all the women are the same then the time it takes them to be comfortable to sleep with him is different. But is your history so write what you find comfortable and it will be minor change.

Strange Loop Sleuth

Honestly, the only issue is that it was somewhat out of character for Wilhelm, but that can be easily explained as some have mentioned. Personally, I like that each girl is a bit different and has their own pace and desires. It makes sense that the inexperienced Artoria takes things much slower than the millenia old devil, and they already established it was more than just a hookup which would have pushed it passed the line.

Darin Ehrhart

I think it's fine as is. It did not seem ooc for Wilhelm, despite everything he is still pretty young and hormones are still somewhat driving. He's not perfect and this is a relative safe way to show he can still be impulsive.(you know, besides fighting Gods and all that...) As it was pointed out, he didn't actually grow with the family and thus never got the hardwired is_family_no_lewd programming. Also Devil society is different from Human society so we can't hold them to our standards...

xGhillie

You can chalk it up to both being emotionally/sexually frustrated and after coming down from the high of that lead to the sexual tension between them which Vene took her shoot and hit (Vene obviously being pent up) but after the sex theyhad, they can slow down and their relationship can develop beyond only a means of satisfying sexual needs

mark tribolta

I like the idea of editing it and saving for later, think you're right on the money saying it was out of character. Seems weird he didn't talk to any of his lovers before fucking his grandmother. My God what a weird sentence haha

Jason Wu

If we're being real here, Raikou and Jinn were the ones that got haremed quick as hell. Venelana had decent exposure before this arc with her and Rias's interludes.

Anonymous

I would vote but… it’s 369… I don’t want to ruin the “magic” number. Jokes aside. My own opinion is for you to keep it as is. But make the rest of their relationship slower. It was kinda sussy how they just met then Fock just cuz their devils. 🤷‍♂️ That’s my take. You ultimately decide how to go about this. Either way, I’m still loving the story so I’m maybe a bit bias with my opinion? 🤔

Anonymous

Inherently the more people you add, the cheaper the romance is. It was weird sure, but you handled it fairly well. There’s no deep love or anything but for mutual attraction it was fine the way it is. Just keep in mind if you keep adding people at this rate, it will get out of hand.

Chorky Dawalded

just keep giveing him shit about it from the non devils

signage_value

I didn't feel that Will's romance with Venelena was cheapened. Though their relationship started with lewd, you did a wonderful job in justifying the actions like devil's nature, Venelena's go get character and both are very attracted to each other. So keep up the good job author.