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Author's note:
I don't intend for this chapter (202R) to "count" as the Patreon bonus chapter this month, partially because I'm not sure if this bit of world-building/background to Tala's situation should go to the RR readers (eventually).

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Rane struggled as he pulled himself up to the wide, flat peak, gasping.

The gray light of dawn was just barely beginning to color the eastern horizon.

He didn’t allow himself to flop to the ground, however. He had found his goal at last.

Six…mountains…

He’d climbed six mountains, and found each peak empty.

Now, however, he looked down on a naked man, sprawled in the snow.

His skin was whiter than the fluffy powder in which he lay and his aura was hard to see to Rane’s mage-sight, though what he could see was decidedly violet.

Finally, a sovereign.

Rane had been questing for months, ever since word had reached him of Tala’s disappearance.

He’d known she was still alive. Even though others had slowly lost hope, he never did.

Now, finally, he was here alone.

“Boy. Why do you keep chasing me?”

Rane froze. “Chasing you, sir?”

“I’ve had to move five times as you got close, and I’m tired of it. What does a body have to do to prove that I want to be alone?” The man was staring straight up at the empty sky above. His voice had a heaviness to it, like a load of snow falling from an entire tree at once. It was something beyond sound. There was simply that quality of silent, cold, waiting at the core of it.

“I’ve come to ask for your aid.”

“That much is obvious.”

Rane hesitated. “I need help.”

“I don’t care.”

“I’ll leave you alone?”

The man was silent. “What do you request? What do you offer?”

“I will leave, never come back, and never tell anyone where I found you.”

“THAT you found me.”

“That I found you.”

“Go on.”

“I request a boon.”

The man snorted. “Just for buggering off? Not likely.”

“Three questions and a minor boon.” That wasn’t ideal, because a minor boon was non-binding, but it should still be something of worth.

“A single question, and a very minor boon.”

Rane hesitated again. What does very minor mean? He wasn’t foolish enough to ask. That would qualify as a question. He’ll tell me if my ask is too much. “Agreed.”

The man sighed and sat up.

His hair was as white as his skin, and his eyes were pitch black, no difference discernible between the various parts that Rane was used to seeing.

After a long moment, he grunted. “Go on. I may have eternity, but I don’t want to spend it with you.”

Rane cleared his throat. He’d been ready for something like this. “Where, exactly, is the human Mage, named Tala, whom I am seeking: mind, body and soul?”

“Been thinking on that question a while, have you?” He grunted. “Well asked, I suppose, especially since it has three answers, any of which would have satisfied a lesser question.” The sovereign eyed Rane.

Rane didn’t react. Three separate answers isn’t good… She should be all together.

“Tala, the consciousness, only exists within her records within the human Archive, which I cannot access.” There was some irritation in that.

Rane closed his eyes. No. Then…she’s gone.

“Tala, the soul is half in the next world and half with her body.”

Not dead? Rane frowned in confusion. He was also very glad that he hadn’t asked a simpler question.

“Tala’s body, that you are seeking…” The older man cleared his throat meaningfully, and Rane blushed.

That wasn’t why he was still searching. He knew what it was like to be on his own, and he wouldn’t leave a friend to that fate if he could help it. He wouldn't lose anyone, if he could help it. Not again.

Not that he would be correcting a sovereign on the issue.

“...is in the city of Platoiri, some eight hundred and twelve miles south of Namfast. She is currently sleeping in her bedroom, within the local hold of the House of Blood.”

Rane didn’t understand that at all. How can her mind not be with her body…sleeping. He almost struck himself in the forehead. Our minds are not our own when sleeping. That must be why.

He shook his head at another way his question could have backfired without proper planning.

Resolved, he nodded to himself. “My boon-”

“Minor boon.” The sovereign corrected.

“My minor boon. I would like you to bring her back to a human city, any not within the forest.”

The man snorted. “No. Even if such an act, by itself, was within the bounds of a minor boon, the repercussions from such a removal would certainly force that request to fall outside what I am willing to give.”

“But I’ll leave faster.”

“Don’t push me, child.”

Suddenly, it was as if the entire world vanished.

Rane seemingly floated within a vast nothingness, the only thing with him were the sovereign’s eyes, somehow blacker than the void.

In that instant, Rane knew that this creature had a singular goal. He wished to wait, in peace, until the heat-death of the universe.

Rane had no idea how he knew this, but it was as clear as the magic flowing through his Bound body.

The Mage couldn’t even fathom the scale of that desire, let alone the actuality of it.

Then, he was back on the mountaintop, clutching his cloak around himself against a soul-deep chill, despite the warming artifacts he’d brought for the climbs.

“Now. You seem to be struggling to breach into Fused. I can tip you over with ease. That would not conflict with my desires, or strain me in the slightest.”

Rane shook his head. “I want her back.”

The sovereign cocked an eyebrow. “I won’t bring her back.”

“Give her an avenue of safety.”

“No, no body is ever truly safe.”

“Ensure she’ll get free, eventually.”

“You really aren’t understanding how this works.”

“Can you give her a chance? Even a small one?”

The white head cocked to one side, seemingly considering. “Hmmm…That might actually be interesting. I do so love how probability tickles when it’s shifting.” He held up a finger, glaring at Rane. “Not like an earthquake, mind you. Just little shifts. They’re pleasant.”

Probability… tickles? Rane swallowed, but couldn’t find it in himself to speak.

“Are you sure you don’t want a nudge into Fused?”

He nodded.

“Fine.” The man flopped backwards, back into the snow.

Rane waited for something to happen.

After a long moment, the sovereign sighed. “You can go now.”

Rane found his voice, then. “But… you didn’t do anything.”

The man nodded sagely. “If that’s what you believe, then it seems like you wasted a trip, and your minor boon, boy. She’s going to get a chance, soon enough.”

“What? What does that mean?”

“No follow-up questions.”

And with that, Rane found himself standing at the base of the mountain.

Comments

Derze

Ngl, this chapter might have been better coming before Tala’s chapter. Very good though. Now where is our favorite Terror Bird?

CringeWorthyStudios

I really love that his entire goal is life is to just… avoid people until the heat-dead of the universe. It’s depressingly relatable.

Matt H

First, let me say that I've enjoyed this story very much. That being said, mind control or other loss of agency arcs in stories are very much NOT my cup of tea. I was hoping the 6 months mentioned in the previous chapter wasn't true and just part of an illusion or something to make Tala compliant. But, since it's true, I expect resolving this arc will take quite a while. I might check back in with the story in a couple weeks to see if this is all over and if it's not I'll be done with this story for a while. I read for enjoyment and arcs like this are just stressful and uncomfortable to me. Good luck with your story!

Quendolayne

Yes, mind control / loss of agency is very boring and make story telling so much easier. And it disturb the balance. If even the month of preparations didn‘t help Tala why didn‘t rhe bad guys overtake the world long ago. It looks like nobody can defend against it and disable any defence, protection, army with it. Or just farm all the ressources human or otherwise. Why learn other magic, this all you need - your mindless slaves will build your pyramids.

julian

Nice in world explanation for Tala getting lucky last chapter

Robert

I honestly see no issues with Rane seeking out a super powerful entity in the hopes of finding his lost friend. Note that Rane knows he isn't strong enough, nor has the personality of a shining knight, to bust into a city of people eaters. I greatly enjoyed the sovereign entity on the mountain. Getting glimpses of foundational truths and personalities is a joy.

Stephanie Washburn

[Edit] Upon a small amount of self reflection, I've realized that "why don't the bad guys just win?" Is probably more of a venting, 'I really don't enjoy this' kind of question than a 'no really, I want to know' sort of question. I've moved my long discussion out into the general chat where it will hopefully not poke directly at someone's perfectly reasonable preferences (even if I'm on the complete opposite end and want to defend the shiny.).

Brian

I like it

Stephanie Washburn

Specifically regarding "If mind control exists, why don't the bad guys just win?": Directly affecting another with strong, persistent, and complex magic requires being much higher magical density than the target. Concept magic is not impossible to defend against directly. Human society chose to not teach it regularly or acknowledge it as a field of magic because of how incredibly dangerous and frequently unethical it is. They do keep very old archons who have a great deal of practice with it though. This left human mages without the kind of practice or inscriptions that would directly help with this. (So far as I can tell) Concept magic does seem to have some functional weaknesses (such as chuckwagons not stopping persistent attention). I'm sure we will discover more flaws as the story goes on, even if Tala's mind remains free. This is a setting where humanity is vastly overpowered by even the smallest of arcane civilizations. The bad guys already won and there's something that makes going after humans less beneficial than the expense. This is a setting where concept magic is so powerful that all human mages are compelled to risk themselves as soon as they are exposed to the design for an archon star, and the only thing that can prevent that is making stars too painful to swallow. We've had a lot of warning signs and foreshadowing here.

Rhaid

Would've been better to post this chapter along with the previous one, not taking up a days chapter, but supplementing it. Even combining it so it immediately leads into the Tali part of the chapter would've been better. Still really hate the previous chapter but this wouldve made it a little more palatable.

Stephanie Washburn

Synthesizing this thought into shorter statements: A) The bad guys did win, have been winning, and continue to win. They just can't be bothered to spend so much effort to completely get rid of a concentration of humans who will inevitably benefit them anyway. B) Concept magic has been shown to be strong enough to affect the entirety of humanity across generations. It has a fully supported and foreshadowed place in the setting. C) Concept magic does seem to have rules and nuances. It is not automatically successful. D) For several reasons, the oldest of humanity have decided that concept magic will not be taught to young mages, even as an acknowledgement of its existence and how to recognize and defend against it. This leaves the majority of mages and archons deeply vulnerable, should they ever encounter a conceptual guide or creator with significantly higher magical density [though at that power difference pretty much any magic type is an auto win button]. E) We don't know the rarity of conceptional guides and creators, or the difficulty of gaining a high level of fine control in those quadrants. F) Direct magic on a target requires overcoming the magical density of the target. Concept magic seems like it will always have to overcome that steep efficiency barrier. With that kind of cost and density grade requirement, pretty much any other type of magic is already a cheaper "auto-win button." Likely, concept magic is just so dang useful that some keep it just for dealing with much weaker entities in specific. G) Do arcanes even get to choose what kind of magic they're good at? Do they need to go through a concept magic font? How do their inscriptions work? Are they innate? Lots of unknown potential mitigating factors. H) Concept magic aside, we're just starting to learn more about arcanous society. I'm sure there are more reasons that arcanes don't bother wiping out the free human population. This slot is reserved for that.

PatronTurtle

If it wasn't for the fact that I don't think the Sovereign did anything because Tala already had a chance, I'd dislike this chapter. Much like mind horror questioning every perspective, probability changes has you question every lucky event. Literal Deus Ex

Notcreepycreeper

chill out dude. its a chapter. in a book. the cool thing about books, being art, is that they sometimes have bits you dont love that help move along the author's vision.

Notcreepycreeper

I like it specifically because this seems to alude to the fairly unlikely series of events that let Alat wake up. Now its explained how that wasn't deus ex machina

Notcreepycreeper

bc tala is a lil baby mage despite her very fast progress. She's done what should take years - decades in months, but the 'bad guys' have had centuries/millenia of life. Going forward I'm sure we'll also see some kind of explanation of why the archons meant to be keeping some kind of eye on Tala missed this. More generally the world building here already predicated this world as one where humanity completely lost - several times. So yes, the bad guys did overtake the world long ago. Now humanity has clawed back a piece, while being careful not to provoke a crazy response

Quendolayne

This are definitely very strong arguments and I agree with them. But (ofc there is a But :-) ) why does humanity still exist and have free will or at least the illusion of free will? Are they insignificant like ants? If so, then I maybe missed it. Otherwise, if humanity is in any way a bother, the worldbuilding is inconsistent with such a large power gap and seemingly ignorance of the fact in the human race. And if humanity are like ants, why abduct Tala, what benefit can an ant bring? Besides this you are right, personally I don‘t like mind control bc it is used as an easy way to make the unbelievable happen. For example this story: „ Found you“ … suddenly 6 months later - no explanations about resistance from Tala, transporting her, taming her, teach her submission and see herself as pet … and so on. Did she question, did she fight, how can such a brain washing work, even with all her preparations … just „a black hole“ … we have to believe it, because it is mind magic. If you compare this to the story of Astrid (eyepulling psychomancer) on Royal Road you will find that there at least is the attempt to explain it in a believable way and not just based on blind „faith“

Adam Andersson

Humanity exists because the creatures who are strong enough to wipe them out effortlessly, the sovereigns, don't care. The creatures who benefit from them don't want to wipe them out and don't want to expend the resources and capital needed to subjugate or exterminate them when it would lead to fewer founts, in the end. The creatures who might want to wipe humanity out don't have the power to.

Stephanie Washburn

If I'm remembering correctly, the explanation on why humans are mostly left alone goes like this: (Reordered to highlight the arcane perspective) A) any large concentration of humans with gates that stays in one place over a long period of time will passively increase the flow rate of magic into the world to such an extent that they act as continental circulation systems in the zeme. This is much of the reason why humans are forced to move cities over a several hundred year rotation. The locations left 'fallow' eventually heal and the high density magic disperses throughout the extra-regional area, slowly equalizing with the rest of the continent. A1) Further explanation on that: Human cities increase and support magical density patterns across the planet in ways that "simply" leaving a thousand fonts in the heart of an arcane city might not support so easily B) any large population of unsupervised gated humans will inevitably and regularly produce a large number of scattered fonts, sometimes ones with all kinds of specialized magic types. These have the benefit of existing pretty much eternally unless destroyed. Humans are further compelled to wander deep into the wilderness on their own before transforming, ensuring a nice distribution of resources. B1) Fonts also increase the magical density of the world, serve as a magical prism to turn otherwise nonmagical plants and animals into valuable treasures, and act as secluded locations with endless sources of magic for a lucky arcane or an enterprising organization to turn into a secret source of power. It seems that fonts can be expanded even after the human is lost to them as well (possibly through methods that humans find horrific or unnecessary considering they can expand their own personal gates). B2) It seems like a reasonable idea that the entire House of Blood could be built around a Font of Blood aspected magic. This may even be the primary source of their initial natural inscriptions if they all go through a font three times and only keep the incredibly small percentage of children who survive all three attempts. B3) Free humans congregate in cities and produce natural fonts along their nomadic path without all of the good gates being immediately snapped up for use in various arcane organizations. If most gates are bound to vestiges or turned into deliberately placed fonts, human cities are an excellent source of "naturally occuring" "unclaimed" resources. C) Unsupervised humans will regularly succeed in their binding but lose the war for their soul, becoming arcanes with excellent potential but no connections. For all I know, they make good recruits or are lovely status symbols as retainers. C1) there seems to be something about not being "for humanity" but Tala hasn't really understood much of that yet. D) Humans ran off to the back end of nowhere and left huge tracks of incredibly dense magical wilderness between them and the nearest arcane civilizations. Their mere presence beyond the wilderness ensues that the wilds remain incredibly dense as the zeme slowly evens out the magical heat wave that humans civilization creates. D1) Humans deliberately picked a spot well away from the center of arcane civilization. Their political neighbors are all weak in some way (if I'm remembering correctly) D2) Humans did still fight wars over their current territory. They killed the ancestors of the leshkin and still have their remnants as a perpetual enemy. There are multiple other border threats on different ends of human territory. And they still get high ranked individuals coming through doing their own thing. D3) Human archons are indeed powerful and immortal. They are still very few in number compared to the less bumpkin areas of the continent, but they are strong enough to make higher ranked beings work hard to take on humanity. D4) Humans are always on the edge between training up enough archons to hold and expand the line and losing too many to fonts that are never found. Nearly all of the older archons Tala has spoken with have touched this topic in some way or reacted to her experiments in light of this fact. D5) Even human family planning seems to indicate that there's either an incredibly high death rate or humans are trying to zerge rush their problems. SEVEN (oh my gynocology) SEVEN children is seen as "a small family" and Tala has 12-14 siblings. That's the kind of birth rate I'd expect if rampant child mortality was the norm. ((Sorry for the shouting, it's just painful to think about having that many children)) Anyway, humanity's continual survival is well earned. They work very hard for it. But there's a strong undercurrent of: "it lasts because the big cultural centers have other things to do"

George Hicken

How much of your issue is the web series format? In a book this chapter would have followed immediately after and given some context and then we’d be back to Tala, with her personality restored, in a new and interesting scenario with just a smattering of background and Tala needing to discover what happened just as much as we readers want to.

George Hicken

> not just based on “faith” We’ve been told multiple times that Tala is an unreliable narrator. In this case, Tala doesn’t know any of that info; whether she struggled or was instantly lights out, or how the personality rewrite was done. Given that, I suspect we’re going to be uncovering what happened along with Tala as she is likely to want answers to those same questions. At this point I don’t think it’s possible to state there’s no explanation, only that we don’t yet have it which is true of many other facets of lore we’ve had glimpses of. Regarding unveiling events in a slightly non-linear fashion - personally I like it. It’s an opportunity for the reader to build theories as to what happened and to learn whether they’re correct along with Tala.

D

At least we know he is dedicated behind what one can expect. GG Rane :)

Stephanie Washburn

Regarding taking it all on faith: I think it's also really important to understand that there is a literary purpose here as well. The author got through all that mind control unpleasantness and awkward "welcome to arcane society" exposition in a single chapter. They used a clever bit of time skipping to convey information that might otherwise take a book or two to introduce and uncover as the protagonist slowly encounters a resistance unit and gets the human propaganda version of what arcane society is like. We just skipped past the long introductory chapters and got right into to the action.

Steven C

"why didn‘t rhe bad guys overtake the world long ago" I mean, they sort of did? But if you mean why don't they control everything, it's because Archons at or approaching this power level also exist. But there don't seem to be all that many, so sometimes you're OK because there's one nearby to raise the costs of making trouble and sometimes... not. "why the archons meant to be keeping some kind of eye on Tala missed this" Surely I'm not the only one suspecting it was part of some deliberate plan that she's not going to be happy about.

Quendolayne

Human propaganda? It sounds like the humans are culprits here in spreading false of biased informations. Fact is Tala got kidnapped and brainwashed. Whatever intentions her captor has is irrelevant. Actions count Intention is what the perps tell themselves to wrongs right in there head. So I think the roles of „good“ and „evil“ (victim/perp) are clear. Maybe the arcanes are even the „not so bad faction“ which are enlightened entities and the humans are in comparison savage with a positive role in the ecosystem like ants or worms and yeah the arcanes have such a high culture (much like the romans which enslaved half the world to finance their way of life). In the end it is right to rebel against them and if possible to find a way to life without their constant threat. So I have really a problem with the biased undercurrent in the word propaganda. Maybe we call it potential flawed information. :-)

Quendolayne

I really really would like to contradict you. But your arguments are well founded and any counter argument would be filled with to much speculation and interpretation how the author want the world is working. So I will read and wait … I still believe (yes believe not know) that there is a inbalance in the worlds power structure but we will see if it will be a dilemma or a foot note in the story telling framework. …… Okay this should be the reply to the second long alphabetical chain of arguments from Stephanie - sorry wrong order.

Stephanie Washburn

No worries. It's partially my fault for putting them both in the same conversation thread and not labeling them properly. I think I may have messed up with the "high culture" phrase. I meant "the center of the most magically, socially, and militarily powerful arcane societies." < I don't know if that place is an empire or what so I defaulted to "cultural center". Regarding propaganda. Every side of a war has their own view of the enemy. They need to in order to function as soldiers (at least, most people do with rare exceptions). I call planned, specifically biased communication propaganda even if it's done by people "on my side". So the "human propaganda version of arcane society" is "arcane society, exclusively as seen and understood by humans that have directly suffered under arcane rule". Is that a completely justified world view? Yes, I'd say it is. But we also wouldn't get to see whatever arcanes think about all this.

Quendolayne

/agree to your definition of „propaganda“ :-) Thx for the inspiring discussion.

FoolRegnant

I get that some people don't like Rane, especially for his interest in Tala, but I think he is one of the best done characters - he's awkward but incredibly loyal, and the thing is, I could see Tala doing something similar for Rane (albeit her action would probably be a suicidal attack) - in a lot of ways, they're made for each other

TheOne320

The problem is that he would survive even that. Sitting in the cold darkness for all of eternity.

TheOne320

The archons that were babysitting her one time already said after that she is on her own and they will not protect her anymore.