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The dialog on this page may not be final, specifically on that last panel. Here's an issue I'm sure anyone who's ever done any creative writing can relate to: the nagging sensation that something you genuinely think is your idea is in fact a line you heard somewhere else and you simply forgot where, making you an unwitting plagiarist as a result. If you recognize that line about not booty calling someone who cares too much about you from a sitcom or something, please let me know and I'll try and come up with something else.
As for the page I hope you like it, and that I'm writing Shiro alright without him being too obnoxious. When I first came up with these two I sort of envisioned them as this borderline perfect couple. Since the nature of their relationship is so scandalous I thought it would be a fun contrast for them to have the most healthy relationship in the story in every way except for the whole vice principal/student thing.
I largely stuck to that, but did make one major change. I figured Miss Holt would likely be the type to fall for a guy who challenges her, someone she could banter with. So I made the decision to turn Shiro into a bit of a sass machine. I think it was the right choice, as in hindsight I think some of the dialog I had written for these two originally was overly mushy and not as interesting.
But what do you think? Any pointers for me on writing a couple with good chemistry? I'd love to hear about it as always.