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Echo of the Past (Patreon)

Published:
2023-01-14 19:34:23
Imported:
2023-01

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So finally Korra and Stella set off on their journey through the echo. My question to you is, whatever that journey should be? 

Easy where with the help of Traiana will they find a quick way out? They've been through enough suffering and deserve some rest.

Harder, where it takes them days, creeping around and being sneeky. It can't be that easy if no one's gotten out of there yet. Even Traiana herself doesn't know the way out, or so she claims.

Or difficult, where it could take them several cycles (Don't worry, I don't plan on writing another 50 chapters about it.). After all, they found themselves in the middle of a battle that shaped the fate of mankind, how could that be easy.

They might even find themselves in a life-threatening situation.

Whatever it is, feel free to let me know how you see it - although as an author I reserve the right to have the final say, your opinion can shape the story, as it has done so many times.

!!You can select more than one option!!

Comments

Azgaroth

Thank for the chapter. I voted for Difficult but, for me in this difficulty they also die some time, like by approching the "center" they spoke of, by making a mistake or even just because of the terrain(like falling from the cliff when the chose to go faster, because they "know" the way down....)

Nicholas Williams Chamarro

Well I would like for them to work for it (difficult) but no, not life-threatening. Why? Because they have already gone through a life threatening event, I would prefer at least something just "difficult" before we plunge into the "life-threatening" again

Nirrvash
>>99626040

True, they have just been through one life-threatening event, and if they remain in the echo until the end of the cycle, they will find themselves once again messed up and on the verge of death - particularly Stella

Azgaroth
>>99625604

But because it's difficult, the Death aren't trauma-inducing or "slow", like for the "center", they feel an aura/attack/shockwave, and then they wonder why their body is back down and without a head, will their Field of View are turning..... Something that make the Death feel like: "Did i just really die, or it's was an illusion/dream?"

Nirrvash
>>99626040

That's a question I've deliberately left unanswered so far - will their supplies run thin as they repeat cycles or will they renew? What do you think, should it reset or not?

Nirrvash
>>99625604

Hmm....That's one perspective I hadn't considered - the death could just be so sudden that they don't even realize it. Another thing, Korra has already experienced death several times and so it shouldn't be so traumatic for her and to be fair it isn't - apart from the pain that precedes it

Cacti

I think the number of cycles depends on how you want the story to develop. This is I think a perfect opportunity for a timeskip (Since timeskips while mc is in town to me always feels a bit off if its something like a year or two since things will inevitably happen but in a situation like this jumping over months at a time it feels a lot more plausible for not much eventful to happen since its a loop with only three people) Personally I think it would be the best if its something like what Azgaroth said where they die at first trying to get to the center and die a few times (but in a way that wouldn't give them the trauma of dying) and I think that if they did that for a few cycles but realized they have insufficient strength, then just have like 1 chapter where a lot of training cycles pass quickly (i.e. we spent 5 cycles trying to re-master our skills, spent the next 10 trying to fight the elite soldiers, where it just gives very brief glances into their struggles to show why people struggled to get out) Personally I think it would be interesting if it was around a year or two they spent inside since that would allow you to make them as strong as necessary for the next arc without it feeling unnatural (And since i'm guessing the next arc's have to do with mind mages and a lot more powerful people I'm assuming its necessary) and them mastering their skills without the system to the level where they can fight elites from the past should make them plenty strong. It also I think allows for an easier transition into the next phase (For example zeet moving in can be and the panic that people from town might have if they learn that they just settled can be skipped since people would be use to it, if you need characters or the town in some way to setup the next arc its I think a lot easier since you just need a chapter for what they missed rather than a lot of chapters explaining each part of the development. (Like if mind mages started attacking it would skip all the initial panic and planning and have the situation settled to some degree) Another thing I can think of as a possible way for them to get out (and a way for korra to power up) is korra communicating with the beasts inside the echo. I think it would be a very good way to introduce another one of the beasts of her lineage, possibly more than just one (to have scenes where they argue over how to raise the cub) which would both allow for a korra power-up and a way to introduce these characters who won't interfere with the main thread since they are just echo's and after this arc is over will never be seen again making. Personally I think it would be interesting to introduce a dragon who at the start despises korra because of her heart but after a few cycles she learns how to get along with the dragon and learns how to use her heart properly.

Nirrvash
>>99681137

Damn, you made some very good points. Yeah, you're absolutely right that this is a very good opportunity to do some time skip. The problem is the people out there, Deckard, Squad Four etc, what about them, how will they take their disappearance - although it would be somehow doable. Idleaf is on my mind the most, though. I need to give this some serious thought. To be honest, at first I didn't plan for Korra and Stella to spend so long in the echo of the past (I mean, they've already been there longer than I intended.), I even considered whether to send them there at all, but in the end I saw it as a great opportunity to reveal more about the labyrinths etc. It appears this could be a bigger opportunity than I thought. That's why I love writing without a hard outline - the story unfolds before my eyes as I write it - in a way, I'm in suspense myself, curious about how it's going to turn out - it's exciting. Since the humans were facing beasts, among other things, in that battle, I considered some interaction between Korra and them, but the fact that she might encounter one that might be the origin of one of her mutations didn't cross my mind, let alone a dragon. I love the idea. Thanks so much for your thoughts and suggestions.

Cacti
>>99681137

I assumed that in a situation like a one year time skip idleaf would be lonely but it wouldn't feel like an equivalent amount of time as we would feel since her lifespan and perspective is just a lot longer due to her much longer lifespan. (So from her perspective while she hates being away from korra for this long and doesn't want it to happen again it would just feel like korra was missing for two weeks from our perspective of time)

Nirrvash
>>99681137

Yeah definitely one way to look at it. On the other hand, even though she's centuries old, she's spent most of that time asleep, aware to some degree of time but oblivious to it most of the time. She's been Awake and fully aware of time for only a few weeks. Good point, though, despite all that she might perceive time differently.

Cacti
>>99681137

I was more focused on how long she has existed rather than how long she was conscious when writing that... Your right that her sense of time is only a few weeks... I can't really see any solutions other than something like she can sense korra is alive even if their connection is so weak that she can't help korra

Nirrvash
>>99681137

Well, I'll try to think of something - we shall see what I come up with :D