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Mother of Learning Chapter 71: Shadows of the Past, a fantasy fiction | FictionPress

After the attack on the Ibasan base had been concluded and it became obvious that no immediate invasion would result from it, Zorian proceeded to re-establish his link to Koth. Since he had dismissed his simulacrum in Koth before the attack, he had to rely on Daimen's help for the second time in the restart.

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Satya Prateek

Haha, not a lot of action in this chapter but so much happened. Goodness, it was about time someone confronted Zorian about his lack of concern for Fortov. Edited - for spoilers, sorry

Anonymous

As I approach the end of this chapter, I find myself subconsciously reading more slowly in an illogical attempt to make the chapter last longer . . .

Anonymous

Ever the adept writer of cliff-hangers, Domagoj. What lung capacity this book has given me that I spend three weeks at a time holding my breath.

Anonymous

Also, the characterizations and dialogue were good this chapter. I appreciate hearing everyone interact rather than things being so plot driven, but I don't write know the solution because the book might balloon to twice or more the size if that approach was applied uniformly.

Anonymous

This is me trying to offer some useful feedback rather than merely gushing: As a side note, I also enjoy experiential descriptions that convey to readers the physical and emotional sensations occurring. However, this again would expand the prose density significantly and affect pacing. A balance must be struck.

Anonymous

I've heard from some that your pacing in the initial chapters is too slow. Then, a few of my highest-rated comments on reddit's MoL discussions concern my desire for a slower and more descriptive and dialogue-heavy style. Perhaps, there's a certain tidal game one has to play with pacing, a certain emotional capital that needs to be created by making the reader hungry, then spending the capital to deepen things---like how you followed a huge battle with a chapter of character development. Are you consciously toeing the line between action and development?

nobody103

No, I'm not that deliberate I'm afraid. I most decide these kind of things by gut feeling, after consulting the story plan made in advance.

Anonymous

Wow, really liked the new chapter. So much progress with people.

Anonymous

You have a talent for writing human drama I'll say that much. Chapter made me all depressed. Good chapter though, thanks!

Anonymous

Will the next chapter be in three weeks or two? Since the current one was delayed

nobody103

Three weeks. You can find the target date on my fictionpress profile. And yes, I realize that's a bit lazy of me. Sorry.

Anonymous

Congratulations on getting onto Top Web Fiction somehow. Their policy still says Fiction Press stories are not allowed, so I wonder what's going on . . .

Anonymous

Reading ch67 when Zorian breaks into the Cyorian web vault. Is there anyhting stopping him from experimenting with inner mind magic on his simulacrums?

nobody103

Other than his current lack of time, the fact his simulacrums have the exact same attitude that he does towards risky mental alterations and concerns about permanent damage a mind mage of his own caliber could inflict on him if he is caught unawares? Nothing, no.

Anonymous

Meh, if i was one of his simulacra, i'd take one for the team, in the same way that every restart is kind of an experiment.

Anonymous

Wow, has it already been three weeks? This time, I feel like it went really fast . . .