Mind Blind 2.0 Feedback Request: Chapters 10 - 13 (Patreon)

I've come to realize that editing interactive fiction chronologically is almost impossible (for me, at least), as it's easier to code related scenes. Scene A in Chapter 9 will influence Scene B in Chapter 13, so it's easier to go straight from rewriting Scene A to Scene B and skip over everything in between so that I don't forget the coding variables and what they alter. As a result, I've been jumping around, and a lot of Chapters 10-13 have already been changed.

However, I'm still eager to hear feedback! Optimistically, your comments will confirm that the changes I've made are the right ones. Even better will be if your comments inspire completely new ideas that make my current draft even better. So please leave comments and feedback on Chapters 10-13 here or on the Sanctum of Spoilers discord.

If you're able to provide feedback (which I really, really hope that you are!) and want a place to get started, then listed below are the areas that I'm still side-eyeing personally.

For All Three Chapters:

1) Romance scenes, particularly at the ending of Chapter 11/beginning of Chapter 12.

2) Scenery description. I've added more in the rewrite, but would like to hear if there's any areas where you had trouble visualizing the surroundings in case I've overlooked them (pun intended).

3) Nick's commentary has gotten a pretty major overhaul already, but I'd love to hear what you guys are hoping for (and can always incorporate more).

For Chapter 10:

1) Feedback on how Button reacts to Reese and other members of Vengeance, especially if there's options that you feel are missing.

2) Feedback on Kenzie's role during the operation. 

3) The fancy dancy feet. Too stupid? Do we need cooler spy gear?

For Chapter 11:

1) Isaiah's Scenes. I just don't feel like he works as well as Caleb, and I can't quite pinpoint why.

2) Any additional ways that you'd like Button to react to the carnapping.

For Chapter 12:

The only thing unchanged about Chapter 12 is the intervention with Sohvi, as the chapter has been structurally overhauled and rewritten. I'd like to hear if there's any bits that you hope didn't get cut, however, as I'd definitely consider adding some of the fluff back in :)

For Chapter 13:

1) For Ace Buttons: how would you like to see the kiss with Kenzie play out?

2) General clarity of technology: how can descriptions of the Pollard machine, etc., be improved? Is there anything that doesn't make sense?