Small edit announcement (Patreon)
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Hey all,
I've done a few more edits to clean up the Saran trip. Been getting consistent feedback that this is a weak spot of the story so far. In this edit, I've shortened the chapters where Vir & Maiya meet the urchins and interact with Bakura. Vir no longer gives money to Barid to steal food for him - Vir and Maiya just do it themselves (they did this anyway in ch 36, so that shortened 35 a bit.)
Also, Vir now comes up with the idea to steal Bumpy disguised as stablehands right away, which shortens the Bakura interactions.
It's relatively minor, so it's not worth rereading, but I think this improves the pacing of those scenes.
I've also added some dialogue for Maiya, expressing her frustration at being unable to jump up onto the rooftops, and her overall lack of skill at Kalari. Upon boarding Bakura's ship, she asks Vir to personally train her in acrobatics & Kalari, which he happily agrees to. I'll work in mentions of her progressing at this in the later chapters.
Thanks again for all of your feedback!