Beta Draft Done! (Patreon)

Thank you all for your amazing patience. I'm finally finished with draft #2 of The Tori Mysteries Book 2: Executioner's Gambit. This beast clocks in at 130k words which is just massive. That's 25% heavier than the first Tori book.

Enclosed are links for all three parts of the draft. Commenting is enabled, so feel free to make changes, leave comments, or if you have something to say that's too heavy for a comment, just insert some blank lines and type your suggestion straight into the text. Don't worry, I can tell comment from text.

Leaving comments here is fine, but I'd really much rather see them in the GoogleDocs so they don't get lost.

If you read with an eye to helping me improve the story prior to publication, here's some things to consider:

• Are any parts too slow? Too skimpy? Did any parts confuse you? Was anything overexplained?
• At the 80% mark, Tori is given a problem with two bad options. She thinks back on trolly problems from school, but this is a "tell" instead of a "show". I would much rather include a scene early on where someone faces a problem with two bad options so she can think back on this instead. If you think of one to add, feel free to leave a comment in the files or below.

Part 1: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_6vxCExBNJfEzT3dnWbCQlJcvjYgyjCv00a_4hamADQ/edit?usp=sharing

Part 2: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oeVZ45rGU_4ydezpBwVh6sv_O5l6xeRY4W4vjWBqmsg/edit?usp=sharing

Part 3: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1lIKjMZ3K777IQ1zoiQGtX3myyWRtow574hcxBxLH-8w/edit?usp=sharing

Thank you all! This wouldn't be possible without you.