Hiveship - $10 WIP Update - March 24 2016 (Patreon)

Hey everyone! So if you haven't read the free update yet, I highly suggest you click here to read it, first!

Where the free update got only a snippet of the full screenplay, you beautiful guys and gals get to view the thing in its full nascent glory. Note that things are prone to change (indeed, I've rewritten shots 35 to 45 at least 4 times ; there's no guarantees that any other shots are safe, either!) but as it is right now, this is what the film is looking for.

I also want to point out that this is a porn film, first and foremost. I strongly believe in framing porn with a narrative, and I disdain writers who sacrifice their narrative integrity for the sake of porn, but that does not mean that narrative should dominate over porn.

As such, once things get hot and heavy and Samus stops talking in favor for moaning, squealing, and gagging (and she moans, squeals, and gags a lot...), the dialogue / sound cues get pretty repetitive.

To quote StrayaSFM:

"If I had a dollar for every time I read '*SAMUS eagerly moaning and gagging*'..."

This screenplay is designed explicitly for two people: myself, when animating and choreograping the scene; and the VA, for recording and dubbing her lines and sounds. The sex scenes rely extremely heavily on dubbing, and as such there's less direction to them, instead relying on the VA's ability to interpret the animation she is dubbing to good effect (something which early takes of the Samus short have shown she is remarkably good at). 

Basically, when you'e reading these scenes, don't take the cues at face-value. Instead, close your eyes and try to imagine the scenes with the cues taken. That is, after all, how the film will be done (minus the closing your eyes, hopefully...)

So without further adieu, click here to read the full screenplay in its current form.