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Note: changed ' Rosestone Sentinels' to 'Stonepetal Sentinels.'

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Galamon hefted a giant pack over his shoulder. With both his armor and the pack, he could not weigh less than five hundred pounds presently. The well-built snow elf rolled his shoulders, testing the weight. Argrave wondered if the straps would snap, given time.

“You look somewhat pitiful,” commented Argrave, wearing his own pack. It was mostly full of water and other such essentials, and quite light compared to Galamon’s or even Anneliese’s.

“It would be more pitiful watching you try and lift this pack,” refuted Galamon. He tapped his fingers against his helm. “With that crown from the ruins, this will prove no burden. Even still… low food, low water… for a long trek as you claim this to be, we are woefully unprepared. You should return more books, pack more essentials.”

“It’s like I told you—stop thinking of it as a cave.” Argrave fit his thumb beneath the strap of his backpack, adjusting it. “If you can confidently hunt for food in a forest, we’ll have no trouble staying alive and well-fed in the Low Way. Even you, strange eating habits that you have. This place has a river, and many springs. I even know what foliage is edible. Anneliese and I can munch on mushrooms if need be.”

Galamon turned his head away, unconvinced, and Argrave looked about the quaint village of Ritmont. It was a relatively humble walled town, mostly relying on agriculture for prosperity. Its proximity to a river and its position crammed between the territories of Jast, Elbraille, and Parbon made it a minor hub of trade, and the place was relatively wealthy. The roads were paved, the guards were well-equipped, and the buildings sturdy. That said, it had no lord—the people walking about were under the Duke of Elbraille directly.

Argrave had stopped here because it was the last vestige of civilization that had a connection to the Order of the Gray Owl, and he had some books to leave behind. It was costing him a good deal to have the tomes delivered back to Jast, but he was not lacking in money. There were many books to return on account of the fact that Argrave and Anneliese both had made tremendous strides in magic.

In their time at Jast and in the road to Ritmont, Argrave felt he’d covered all of his bases. He’d learned C-rank healing spells in case of emergencies, C-rank warding spells to protect both himself and a small group, and C-rank elemental spells of some variety to cover all his bases as according to each element’s strengths. Anneliese had done much the same, though her array of spells was already quite diverse as she had been at C-rank longer than Argrave.

Beyond that, Argrave had learned one blood magic spell at C-rank: [Pain’s Thorn], a long-range bolt not dissimilar to the D-rank spell of the same school, [Pierce]. Blood magic was most effective at quick bursts of extreme power, in Argrave’s estimation, and until he was Black Blooded, he did not intend to learn any more blood magic.

“Will you keep with tradition and inform us of our objective only once we have arrived at this Low Way?” Anneliese asked pointedly.

Argrave clicked his tongue, drawn from his thoughts. “Awfully cheeky, but you’re not wrong. I’m tempted to do just that when you paint me as such a monster.” He adjusted the backpack on his shoulder. “Well, I’ve never been a traditionalist, and for this journey, there’s a lot to explain. We’ve got everything packed in our bags. Let’s return to the carriage and discuss things.”

They walked out the gates of Ritmont, and Argrave set his bag inside the carriage, just beside the many satchels full of the black liquid magic created by the Amaranthine Heart. He sat on the side of the carriage, while Anneliese and Galamon both stowed their backpacks in the luggage compartment of the carriage.

“Okay. Before we begin, I’m going to consult you two about this. Frankly, I’ve been torn this entire journey.” Argrave rubbed his hands together, and then eventually conjured a ward to block out their conversation for caution’s sake.

“So… there’s a coven of vampires within the Low Way. They’re mostly pacifistic barring the occasional gruesome bloody murder, but they also have something that I need. We have two options.” Argrave raised one finger. “Entreat them for the thing.” Argrave raised the second finger. “Annihilate them.”

Galamon and Anneliese had been with Argrave long enough to recover quickly from his words. Galamon was the first to respond, saying, “For vampires, there is only one option. Pull them out by the root. Take no chances.”

Argrave crossed his arms. “You might see why those words are somewhat dubious coming from you, Galamon, if you introspect.”

“I am aware of the irony. My own existence is an antithesis to my ideals. I should kill myself… but I value my life over my values.” Galamon stared Argrave down. “It is a source of shame and guilt to me. But I know the beast that chains vampires just as they do, and I know also that scant few of them can be trusted to control it. Even I have faltered before the hunger… as you well know, Argrave.”

Argrave pushed his tongue against his cheek, surprised by his companion’s uncompromising answer.

Before he could offer a response, Anneliese questioned, “Do you truly believe you can reason with this coven?”

“There’s forty of them,” Argrave brought his hand to his chin. “Maybe less. Some of them may have died, hunted by the Stonepetal Sentinels. You might think such a size would be difficult to sustain, but a literal river of blood runs through the Low Way. It tastes foul, supposedly, but it sates their hunger.”

“And the answer to my question?” Anneliese pressed.

Argrave laughed. “As I’m sure that you’ve discovered, I can reason with a lot of people that seem difficult to reason with. The infamously unruly Rowe ‘the Righteous’ even confessed his admiration towards my abilities… in between calling me a ‘wormy bastard,’ or something like that.” Argrave spread his hands out. “I can do it, I think.”

“But you won’t,” said Galamon. “You won’t even try.”

Argrave frowned, and Anneliese contributed, “I am inclined to agree with Galamon on this matter. Most vampires… are not worth risking our lives for.”

“Careful. You’ll make Galamon shed tears of blood,” Argrave said, voice distant. “Alright. Alright,” he said, raising his hands in surrender. “You outnumber me. I submit. In that case, we’ll be working closely with the Stonepetal Sentinels. These guys… aren’t pleasant. It’s why I even considered the option of diplomacy with vampires.”

“Who are these Sentinels?” Anneliese questioned.

“They call themselves ‘the last remnants of the Order of the Rose.’ There’s truth to that, I guess. They’re knights and mages who have pledged themselves to ridding the Low Way of the abominations created by the Order of the Rose. The last sentinels against the tide of abominations. Of late, they’ve been trying to combat this vampire coven.”

Anneliese nodded. “They do not sound so terrible.”

Argrave looked off to the distance. “The Stonepetal Sentinels retained all the unpleasant traits of the Order from which they descend. They don’t like outsiders, who they view as people seeking to steal their wealth and knowledge. They’re arrogant, because even after all the abominations the Order of the Rose Rose has brought to the world, their magic is still pretty potent. Of course, they lost most of the important magic. Faded glory, all that,” Argrave shook his head.

“They’re brash and rough on account of years of patrolling the Low Way, and they view everyone who isn’t descended from the Order of the Rose as lesser.” Argrave gaze jumped between the two of them. “Especially those who aren’t human. Unlike in Jast, where the biggest enemy was the common man, the Stonepetal Sentinels have many mages in their number, so a simple Circlet of Disguise will not be sufficient.”

“I see.” Anneliese nodded. “After what occurred at Mateth, they may not be especially welcoming to us.”

“True enough, if news of it has even reached them. Let’s hope not.” Argrave directed his attention to Galamon. “I hope you’ll rein yourself in, Galamon. No matter what they say, just ignore it. Just because we’re going on the Low Way doesn’t mean you can’t take the high road.”

Galamon frowned in confusion, Argrave’s idiom lost on him. He said nothing to Argrave’s warning.

Anneliese followed up, asking, “Once we retrieve this item, we will proceed into the Burnt Desert?”

“Nope,” Argrave shook his head. “There are two more stops. One, technically, because both are on the same path. We have to go to the mountain’s peak to retrieve a set of daggers, and along the way, we’ll fetch the Crimson Wellspring. This object is what creates the rivers of blood flowing throughout the Low Way, and is yet another ingredient to make me Black Blooded. Coupled with the item the vampires have, it’ll be three out of four. The last is in the Burnt Desert.”

Anneliese processed what Argrave had said. “One item to draw magic from life… another to create ceaseless blood—ceaseless vitality,” she connected the dots. “And this item from the vampire coven—what exactly does it do?”

“It’s a scalpel to be used for the surgery to make me Black Blooded. I’m not sure of the specifics… but it doesn’t actually cut. It modifies and morphs flesh, and even bends the spirit…” Argrave thought about it and had a spontaneous shudder. “The vampires call it the Unsullied Knife. They tried to use it to cure their vampirism—excise the beast out of them. After failing, they hoard it. I suppose there’s nothing else they could have done with it, but it is still unfortunate.”

“What foes will we face beyond the vampires?” Galamon questioned.

“Now that’s the important question,” Argrave pointed his finger at Galamon. “It’s important to know how to deal with the guardians in the Low Way. This’ll be a long one, folks, so let me wet my throat and get comfortable…”

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I had a dummy long explanation of all the spells Argrave had learned, but it felt dry and ultimately unnecessary so I removed it. I think it's much more interesting to see the spells come into action than to see them listed and then maybe never used. Of course, some people will think the magic system is one of convenience if I go this route... never can really win. 

If you guys have thoughts contrary to my judgement, I'd love to hear them. I may not reply to every comment, but I do read and consider them.

Comments

Sky

I think you've got the magic, right. Most writers spend so long infodumpijg their magic systems, that it gets boring, no matter what type it is. This way, you are 'showing', and not 'telling'.

Andrew Webb

I tend to skip sections devoted to skill/spell lists, and instead I mentally summarize that, "main character continues to grow stronger". So ya, the current way you've written is my preference.

tibbish

The explanation seemed just fine to me. If enough people speak out about it just start posting a list of his skills/stats/etc at the end of the chapter for any major changes.

Shadeymankey

With this character you have established how he regularly ignores sleep to study another spell just a few more hours. Honestly, one would EXPECT him to have a spell for nearly any occasion after appropriating that many books from a magic order. So this was definitively the better choice

buca117

Agreed. Reading about how your specific flavor of chain lightning works would be a waste of our time. We're reading an isekai LitRPG. We're so far down the rabbit hole of fantasy fiction that we're in a niche of a niche. I can understand needing to make sure all readers understand your world, but at some point an author has to draw a line and say, if you can't ride a bike without training wheels, why are you shopping in a Tour de France-level bike store? Your magic system is different in many ways from others, but you're allowed to assume a certain level of genre savviness when you're writing a story this deep in the weeds. Any reader of this genre that can't be expected to know the basic mechanics of magical combat and how any mage with Argrave's established limited repertoire would work to prepare themselves should not be reading works in this genre. It'd be like expecting developers to tutorialize Eve Online so thoroughly that someone that's never played a video game in their life could step in and start a booming corporation. This story is way too many levels deep to expect that level of hand holding, and it would be patronizing bordering on fraudulent to treat your actual target market as if they've never seen magic before. To act as if, for some reason, they'd find the idea of magic spells so captivating as to find it as engaging as reading about the drama your actual characters present.

Enzo Elacqua

I’m trying to figure out spells for a story I’m writing myself. If you don’t mind me asking, where do you get all your spells? Do you come up with them yourself? Or is ther some one you look to?

nemorosus

I might use what I've seen in other mediums as a reference, but by and large I just think about it until something suitable comes, trying to keep in mind the nature of what I want to achieve.

buca117

An expert is an expert, regardless of field. We dedicate our time, energy, and limited funds to something we feel passionate about, a fact that, surprisingly, a great many people genuinely can't say. Having an interest other than existing is a genuine gift: it's a foundation on which to build happiness and contentment. No matter how small, no matter how niche, no matter how devalued that interest is by others, it's something that brings you satisfaction, a commodity in incredibly short supply in this world of late. We've found something that gives us joy; there are millions of people in this world that go through life wishing they could be so lucky.

WIlly Willy Wild Wild West

Show, don’t tell. I hate infodumps in the forms of encyclopedic information, and if someone has got this far and can’t tell the feel for the magic system then fuck ‘em.

BubblyGhost

I know that black blooded can come off a little. . .okay, a lot, edgy; however Im still stoked for it.

XystOblivion

You could always add an auxiliary chapter with all that information in it for the people that want to read about it. You could do that while still showing that information in a way that is meaningful in the story. Thanks for the chapter!

BluEarth

You could have him do a Status update with a Spells List at some point to appease the anti-Deus ex machina peeps

Anonymous

It’s 100% fine to use a system of convenience, as long as the end result is fun. Look at Harry Potter — no real system to speak of, and still a very fun and popular series.