Original song #2: Castles (demo) (Patreon)

this is the first serious original song I've made, I came up with the melody and lyrics, the beat was produced by my friend Princess (https://soundcloud.com/ellipsis-princess) This is a really personal project that I put a lot of my heart into, so it's kinda embarrassing and I was scared to upload it. It's really hard to write actual lyrics that aren't about farts or whatever, I just keep thinking "aaah this sounds so corny" but I powered through it cause I know people believe in me..I just need to polish it a little more (probably take out the silly intro haha) and record the 2nd verse and it'll be ready for the album. If you have any tips or think something needs to be added to the instrumental or the vocals or something to make it sound better, let me know in the comments, any input is appreciated cause I always use it to make my stuff sound better.