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Hey everyone! Here is the Work in Progress for Chapter 72 I hope you guys enjoy! :D

KNOCK KNOCK KNOCK!

Those three, distinct, hammer-like noises sent chills down my spine.

I didn’t know what it was.

But over the course of the week, I’ve come to increasingly dread these unexpected, unannounced, completely unscheduled interruptions to the only safe haven we’ve been able to carve out of this hostile world.

Maybe it was because there was never any way of telling what you could expect on the other side.

Or maybe, it was just because half of the time, those knocks always acted as a prelude to another curveball that needed to be addressed; an unexpected problem that needed to be resolved.

Whatever the case was, I began sprinting into action the second those knocks ended.

“Ilunor.” I began, prompting the Vunerian to nod affirmatively in acknowledgement. “I need you to perform one of your tricks. Can you cast that invisibility field around the whole setup again?”

A brief mana radiation warning marked his response, as for the first time, he actually committed to responding with his actions first, and words later. “A trivial task.” He added cockily, that smug grin somehow managing to expertly hide the growing nervousness stirring beneath the surface.

Sure enough, a brief glance towards the balcony yielded nothing. No drones, no signal amplifier, not even the cable that ran along the floors to power the whole setup.

I turned to Ilunor with a begrudging look of appreciation. “Good job Iunor.”

Following that up with a silent closure of the balcony doors and a drawing of the curtains made all our problems disappear, at least for now.

“Alright.” I hyped myself up, taking those tentative steps towards the door… but not before turning to Ilunor one final time. “Just act natural.” I ordered.

“Oh please, Emma Booker. I practically live for these acts of theater.” He responded. And… true to his word, I could barely detect a hint of fear or concern beneath that thick layer of pomp and circumstance.

If this whole letter mission went up in smoke, and you lost your noble titles, I swear you could make a good enough living working at whatever your equivalent of broadway is. I thought to myself, just as my hand reached for the door, gripping its ornate door handle. With a solid inhale, and a sharp satisfying ka-clink, I opened the door to reveal…

Not Vanavan.

Or any other professor.

Not even Larial.

But a face that I otherwise immediately recognized.

And one that looked none too pleased to see our group.

It was that eccentric elf bridge-guard from a few nights before.

OH!” The bridge-guard apprentice announced. “It's you lot.” He immediately turned his nose up, his eyes averting from my lenses.

“May I help you…” I trailed off, realizing the EVI hadn’t flashed a nametag next to him. This mere momentary lapse in conversation seemed to be all the incentive the man needed to fill in the blanks, all the while maintaining that frustrated look of annoyance that continued to dominate his expression.

“Apprentice Ral Altaria Del Narya Sey Antisonzia the Second!” He announced proudly, balling up both of his hands before placing them by his hips in a heroic pose, causing his cloak to unfurl and swoosh out to his sides.

A swift surge of mana radiation caused a gust of wind to flutter it about in the otherwise windless corridor.

“Right.” I nodded. “Apologies Apprentice Ral Altaria Del Narya Sey Anisonzia the Second.”

“Apologies noted and accounted for, you cantankerous creature.” He responded with a small look of smug satisfaction on his face.

That response… strangely enough, didn’t necessarily bother me. Because the man, for all his boisterous bluster, just felt like a big joke about half the time he spoke.

Though that still didn’t stop me from taking him as a legitimate threat, given his assigned position and responsibilities.

“So, how may I help you?”

“That depends…” The man paused, manifesting a previously unseen clipboard to the ping of another mana radiation warning, as he began flipping through its otherwise blank pages. “... Cadet Emma Booker of Earthrealm now is it?”

“Yes, that’s me.”

“Well, Cadet Emma Booker of Earthrealm. I am here, first and foremost, to execute my duties as an apprentice and a ward of this tower; to administer a wellness check.”

“Oh, I’m quite alright, thanks for asking-”

“No! Not for your sake you insolent suit of animated armor! But for the sake of your fellows.” He gestured to his left and right, at the hallways and the stairs that led down from the top floor of the tower. “I have received reports of an active and deliberate disruption to the general peace. Tell me Cadet Emma Booker of Earthrealm, have you or have you not-” The man paused, looking left and right haphazardly and frantically, before leaning in closely, practically an inch from my face.

My heart skipped a beat, as I was about ready to have my entire operations unraveled right before my eyes.

“-observed anything over the course of your night through your windows? Any… ghostly premonitions of an invisible avian predator? Any near-silent whooshing and buzzing followed closely by a disembodied arm chasing about poor defenseless birds?”

The man’s questions… wasn’t what I was expecting at all.

Moreover, it instantly gave me the wiggle room I needed to take a page out of Ilunor’s playbook.

Bold-faced lying.

“No.” I answered bluntly, before just as quickly gesturing into the room. “In fact, we were just having a nice evening together…” I began trailing off, just as my rear view cameras began revealing what amounted to the theater Ilunor had prepared.

For in the middle of the living room, in plain sight to anyone by the door, was a Vunerian currently downing an entire trolley cart’s worth of food. A sight-seer was splayed out in front of him, currently on pause with the image of some dragon caught flying mid-frame.

As if on cue, he craned his head towards me with a cupcake in hand, his eyes narrowing on the apprentice knowingly as he slowly pushed the tasty morsel into his maw in a menacing fashion, before turning back towards the sight-seer leisurely; playing the part of a couch potato.

“... watching sight-seers. The only flying shenanigans we were experiencing was a sight from Lord Rularia’s sight-seer!” I finally continued, prompting the apprentice’s eyes to narrow even further, until finally, he relented. His features soon shifted to something less intense. If only for a moment.

Comments

Dylan m

im dying of laughter at this mental image

Matt Null

I'd imagine Illunor would end up looking not too dissimilar to a snake with how many calories he is cramming in his maw rn.

Nnelg

...Emma isn't great at this, but she's trying.

I Dare Korval

Luckily she has a helmet to hide her face, and can mute her laughing inside if she needs it. Looking forward to the full chapter tomorrow.

BigBro Bluesman

God that last part had me on the floor oh God that mental image of a cobalt threateningly eating a cupcake

David Ellis

Oh my god, Emma better tell Ilunor that his performance is worthy of *Homer* and then refuse to clarify who she is referring to! (*Belch! *)

Nathaniel Moncada

I don't want to be a critique but I feel like the writing has been too "wordy?" lately. I get it when it comes to the dialogue of the nexian citizens (plenty of word soup and puffing) or when wanting to illustrate a certain scene in depth. However, Emma's inner thoughts, and even the narration sometimes feels a bit lengthy for no meaningful reason. Like a casual scene that can be described in one sentence gets short of a paragraph or an idea gets worded 8 different times in the same sentence/paragraph. Essentially , there's been some parts where it could be deleted from the writing and it would have zero effect on the flow, emphasis, overall scene/idea/context. Sometimes it feels like I'm reading a Shakespearian play rather than a casual sci fi/fantasy novel

13L00D13ANE

Yeah man i hear ya and i do agree, *but*.. thats kinda the whole vibe, nah? Like such superfluous excess that it even bleeds over into the narration XD its kinda par for the course, ngl

Nathaniel Moncada

I guess. Maybe this is all lowkey on purpose and the author is showing how nexian behaviorship is slowly bleeding into Emma herself, but if I'm just over analyzing it and it's not on purpose then it is needlessly excess (at least when it comes to Emma and the narrator). Because if the point is showing contrast in how superfluous is the nexus in terms of linguistics compared to a more "utilitarian" Emma and they both sound the same. It kinda defeats the purpose. If it's a title for tat conversation between Emma and some nexian then I see the reason why Emma does it. Yet, when alone in her thoughts and she still does it then....

Anonymous

You're not wrong, but...this is the author's journey. Think of them as a Frank Herbert or GRR Martin and simply roll with it

Ragnar Pendon

Daaaang... calling out the last chapter's predictions like that? xd

Nathaniel Moncada

I suppose that's one way to view it. TBC, I'm not saying he's a bad author otherwise I wouldn't be subscribed

NOPisprettycool123!

I wonder if vunerian fire breathing uses calories for fuel and the magic sparks the transfer and release of energy?

Kevin Quintana

Agreed. I've enjoyed the story, the characters are nice and distinct from eachother i've liked the character interactions the world building etc. The author clearly enjoys their work too, such enthusiasm is a good thing, but it can be easy to get so excited that a few words becomes a lot of words. Until the page is filled with text repeating the same acronyms over and over, filling some paragraphs with a dozen more words than they need. It can get a little brain hurty at times. Jcb112 if you ever read this, i know critiques like this can feel... mean. Especially if the one making it doesn't do a good job of explaining what they mean and doesn't give any actual advice. Sorry. Just know that you are a good writer with room to improve, and i and many others look forward to watching your progress. Perhaps one day you'll get published and become one of the big names, or perhaps not, either way a fine journey it will make.

Willow Arkan

They sure sent their best and brightest to investigate these sightings. luckily they don't have a clue what a drone is or, apparently, camouflage.