Rejected Rough - Beast from Another World page 04 (Patreon)

This is the first rough presented that I rejected. This is also where I found that I need better descriptions of this transformation due to the language barrier and how unique this transformation is (since no one else really is doing this transformation this way or with this level of detail).

Her axle should not have been formed already, her tires should not have rims that quickly, and they should be perpendicular to her arms rather than her wrists bending at very odd angles (and definitely not have her arms attached on the outside of the tires).

I have sent my own rough corrections and detailed information correcting the issues I had with this page. But since this is delayed due to my errors in not communicating well enough or knowing that this was a very unique transformation, I'm sharing with you guys what would have been page four. The layout will be about the same with similar views, but the way the tires form here will be different on the final version.