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I flooded them, and they burst, the telepathic control of Lehesion weakening. I darted towards him, smashing his body apart once more. Taking out a few runic plates, I detonated them, deforming the area. Lehesion's body devolved into a collection of talking organs and speaking skin. The remnants controlling him scattered, unable to tolerate the horror of inhabiting such a body.

I remained within, tearing it apart. As I gored the mind into pieces, a familiar presence coursed in. I peered around, and I sneered. Time stopped, and a voice echoed out like far-off thunder.

"We meet again, living metal."

Chapter Begin

Around me, Eonoth's presence coursed in. It reduced the fabric of space into its plaything and warped all it touched into an eternal void. As the dark reached the edges of my wake, I pushed back against it. The overbearing presence crushed me down, and I buckled. I collapsed as my skin peeled off. My bones disintegrated to a liquid, and my teeth shattered.

I stood, my body reforming several times a second. This wouldn't work. Instead of trying to keep such a large area untainted, I pulled my wake to the surface of my skin. The pressure reduced, and I only bled from many ruptures across my body. The pressure mounted like diving deeper under the sea.

Like a leaking ship, I groaned and bled under the weight of the dimensional shifts around me. They hadn't overcome me yet. The pressure increased, and my body crushed into a small puddle as a laugh echoed. I held on, pulling my wake closer. I condensed it into a minute point, the size of an apple. I abandoned my body, letting it disappear, but I held onto this tiny bastion of sanity I maintained.

I closed it and my mind off, becoming a bulwark. I existed within the sea of burden, holding on. Eonoth tapped the tiny sphere like a child tapping a glass tank full of fish. Cracks in the wake rippled through me, several of my minds dying. I rallied, pulling my wake further down. I still existed, the size of a coin. It tapped against me once more. I died, or at least it felt like it.

I'd have to pull myself further down, deeper into these waters. I strained every mind to tighten myself to a tiny point. Another tap arrived, and many of my psyches died. I compressed to the size of a penny. Death rained from Eonoth's tampering. My mind squealed as I bit down hard, turning myself to the size of a pupil. The thumping continued, and chunks of my psyche perished.

I reached my limit, becoming the size of a pinhead. Every part of me struggled to maintain this, and I could not squeeze more blood from this stone. The tapping ceased, so I waited. With another thud, a chunk of my animas died. However, I held my ground, keeping my dimensional sanctity from the Old One.

Taps arrived in waves. One. Two. Sets of threes. They whittled me apart like a stone being shot. Cackling coursed around me, an endless discord of madness. I ignored it and regenerated my mind, parts of myself dying with each tap. I kept reconstituting my sanity across each storm while holding myself in this minuscule form.

The retaliation grew in volume, size, and scale. I tempered an unending set of thumps. Likely subtle to this strange presence, it eviscerated all of me. I held onto memories of what my sane mind was, remembering its form but unable to recreate it under perpetual pressure. My thoughts shook, becoming disjointed and chaotic.

It reminded me of Valgus infiltrating my mind. No. Far worse. This was a raw, psionic death, not a deft, technical usage of mental might. Holding together, I crushed under Eonoth's probing. It reminded me of dying in the psionic fluid but from a physical, tactile impact. I laughed at the irony of the situation.

Earlier, I easily dismantled a pressing enemy of Schema who threatened galactic peace. Against an Old One, I was a dimensional pinhead who couldn't even hold a physical form. There were levels to this game, and I was at the bottom. There was no lower that I could sink, yet I held onto that thought.

It sparked joy in my chest. It arrived like a thundering chorus and a resounding cheer. Here I was, nothing more than a pawn on an endless chessboard, a piece waiting for my inevitable slaughter. I was pulled and tugged by the masters who carried control of everything around me.

But I was in the game. That much was undeniable. One day, I could win.

Sensing my joy, Eonoth's voice echoed like music did while walking into a club.

"You resist me? And with palpable elation. Interesting. You are so easily broken, yet you return all the same. Where is your limit?"

I crushed.

Eonoth said, "Resist."

I crushed ten times.

"Resist."

I crushed a hundred times.

"Resist."

I crushed a thousand times, my mind struggling to maintain sanity.

"Hah hah, resist me. Resist. Resist. Resist.

I wondered if resist was even a word. Could I even spell it?

"Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist."

I quaked, my core aspects struggling to maintain a definite form.

"Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist."

Instead of holding onto my entire mind, I kept a smaller piece. This eased the process. It made it easier to let go of what Eonoth carved away.

"Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist."

I pieced away at what defined me and my mind. I continued whittling away until I decided to remain. Yes, I would remain. That was all I needed. It was all I was.

"Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist."

This, too, would pass. I would persevere.

"Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist."

I would withstand.

"Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist."

I would weather this storm.

"Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist."

I would remain.

"Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist. Resist."

I would endure.

"Enough."

I smashed into nothing, falling into the Old One's abyss. I reconstituted, my wake pulled into some other plane. I peered around, remembering this place from long ago. I grabbed the side of my face before squeezing in frustration. I thought I'd pushed through some barrier or made a difference.

No. I was nothing still. More nothing, maybe, but still a muted presence to these interdimensional beings. While I considered how to even practice whatever that was, an ever-shifting form encroached. I gazed at an indefinite being of cosmic origin and an unknown scale.

Eonoth laughed.

"You...You try to resist my pull. Why?"

I waved a hand.

"I'll answer, but don't say resist anymore."

Eonoth wrapped around me, not touching but pressing from all angles.

"In my domain, I will do as I wish. You may resist. Resist. Resist...Now speak."

I floated in the ether. Eonoth scoffed.

"You've become defiant. Baldowah did not lie."

I narrowed my eyes. Eonoth shivered.

"You hold to what you've said...I shall not speak the word resist, as you've asked."

Whenever Eonoth said the word, it repeated in my head, an unending symphony that built like some cognitive virus. I trembled as it expanded, taking more of my mind each passing second. Before it overwhelmed me, I pulled several psyches around the phrase and threw them into my dimensional wake. In the ether, I scrambled them into nothing, killing their cognition.

The virus died with them.

Eonoth retracted his undefinable form.

"Your mind is durable as your body. Perhaps more so."

I sneered.

"Why did you bring me here?"

Eonoth rippled the ethereal plane around us.

"You've destroyed my champion. Do you wish to take his place?"

"No."

"Then where am I to search for another? Tell where others may reside and who could take his place? Perhaps your friends? Althea? Torix? Hod?"

Rage swelled in my chest, and I channeled mana, ready for anything. Eonoth sighed.

"You're less talkative than before. It is irritating."

"I'm not your entertainment."

"You have been, are, and will be. Until you die. Until all die."

"Or you die. It depends on who goes first."

"You believe your resistance was a sign that you may stop me?"

Eonoth didn't listen when I told him to stop saying that word. I was done. I crossed my legs and closed my eyes. Eonoth's voice rose in volume.

"Your mind believes it can build on an infinite basis. However, you are restrained by laws and cannot outdo what you've spawned from."

I channeled mana into my runes.

"I am greater than your dimension."

I achieved a sense of peace.

"Your silence shows your will. Hm. Then listen. I will fold time to undo what has been done. If you continue dismantling my champion, I shall utterly shatter your mind. You will not be able to resist what I've done the next time. I will infest your mind with enough madness that even a thousand species would be driven insane."

Eonoth quaked.

"A taste of what will come."

A dozen cognitive viruses erupted in my head. I writhed, my mind falling apart while Eonoth laughed. Resist encompassed vast swaths of my mind before I kamikazed into my dimensional wake. I cleaved pieces of myself apart like a man amputating fire off his body. Where I cut, I regenerated without the virus.

Pieces of it remained, and it overwhelmed the sane parts of myself yet again. I died, reformed, and died again. I kept the cycle of self-sacrifice continuing, destroying my mind until it was unrecognizable. It took several hours and thousands of psionic deaths before I became whole again. I was me.

Finally able to, I opened my eyes. The Old One's plane had disintegrated, and I was on Mt. Verner in the warp drive. I stared at steel walls and ionizing clouds that encroached over me. The doors opened, and I stumbled out onto Blegara. I caught my heft with a gravity well just before I landed.

I would've caused a massive explosion from tripping. Staring at the sandy ground, I took several breaths, calming myself down. I pulled myself upright while sitting down and grabbing the sides of my head. I heaved for a while. Nothing came up.

A soldier walked up to me.

"Uhm, Sir, is everything ok? Did something happen at Mt. Verner?"

I shook off my unease.

"No. I just need a moment."

She waved.

"O-of course. Send a message if you need anything."

She left me, and I held down my nausea. I stared up. In the distance, a weak and feeble barrier protected some of the city. No constructor golems passed over the skyline. No one fixed the poorly made structures. No one had handled the Elysium forces landing on the planet.

I was in the past.

I stared at my hands, wondering if I was even still alive. Was my imprisonment an implanted memory? Was anything real? I shivered, not knowing how long Eonoth trapped me in that place. It could've been years or decades, and I couldn't make it out. My time there blurred together, memories of that time like crushed glass. A corrupted mosaic. A smashed plate.

Was I broken?

In the corner of my vision, a notification rang out.

[Unique skill gained! A Mind's Defiance | Level 10 - Few are willing to die for what they believe in. None are willing to die forever. None but you. Know that your deaths are with meaning. They are a statement to those that would doubt you. They are a testament to your will and vision. They are a mark against those that would destroy all you love.

You have chosen to defy forces beyond us, and we will stand with you.

+10% to Mental Reconstitution Speed.

+10% to Mental Resilience.

+10% to Mental Regeneration.

+100 points for creating a unique skill!

Skill level up! +90 points in A Mind's Defiance.

Skill level up! +234 points in Temporal Compression.

Skill level up! +102 points in A Manifold Mind

Trees unlocked!]

Gazing at the notification, a wave of calm passed over me. Enormous amounts of mana radiated in. My psyches crystallized, becoming rigid and dense. I swallowed back down a wave of nausea, and my trembling lessened to shaking. Clarity coursed, and motivation surged.

That's right. I wasn't alone. After taking a breath, I said the word.

"Resist."

I winced, but it left no mark on me. I remained whole and sane. I repeated the word, testing myself, and I retained coherency. I stood on unsteady feet and squeezed my shaking hands. The tremors stopped. The fear faded. Before heading out, I gave myself a moment to remember my resolve. This would be a long road, and I'd only taken a single step.

It was time to take another.

Comments

Chance Rose

Wow man. That was intense. Just surviving in eonoth's wake was all he could manage. But manage he did. It's a huge step forward and I am really wondering how he is going to combat them. He is going to have to do some serious dimension training to combat theirs, and it will be interesting to see how he does that. Maybe schema actually helps train him personally? He did state he had never seen someone wield dimensional energy with as much finesse as schema had, so it would kind of be the real benefit schema could give him as his patron.

Shane Fletcher

it would be really cool if he made some dragon themed golems, like maybe have each of them take ten blue cores to make, and give them a breath attack, like a cone of singularities. that would be awesome.

Wrath

Another amazing chapter that i'm so glad I got to read. I just need more..... A LOT MORE CHAPTERS. My hunger for chapters is insatiable.

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

Chance Rose

Always happy to help. Just kind of made sense when I was thinking about it. If punching or conventional methods worked, I doubt they would be so much trouble. His dimension self is the only reason the have problems with him, so it just made sense for that to be his true weapon. And schema is a master of it so since the are working together now, it made sense.

Anonymous

What coz it's the first time Daniel has taken a straight up l and against an extremely foreshadowed threat?

Monsoon117

I read between the lines and assume comments are made with a phone at least 90% of the time.

Connor Alexander

That was awesome, it the true old fashion sense. Showing off how powerful the Old Ones are was an amazing step, and putting Daniel up against the immensity of their might was a great method to scale the next major arc. Thanks for the chapter Monsoon!

serguzzle

Schema's ongoing statements of supports are really heartening. It shows the escalation of this great game: his earlier meltening in the face of an Old One's presence has been expanded to being crushed, and at least now there's explicit recognition of that happening by the System. I find Schema's awareness of his development, despite the time-travel, to be very interesting, and not something that was previously foreshadowed, I think (and that is fine, not everything has to be, that was a pleasant surprise). This was dope, and frankly a lot more compelling than the slice-of-life on Earth. Repetition for impact is tough, and it is easy to go overboard. I think it's lightly on the "too much" side of things, but Daniel's own comments on it helped a lot. I think overall you've started really hammering on the thematic undercurrent for this arc. Overall there's been some really big highlights here especially, and I'll break down my thoughts more piecewise below: - The actualization of Daniel's place in this world: a wonderful scoping and assessment of the setting. - The gun now pointing at his face and limiting his activities: Old One attention and perhaps bemusement. - The aforementioned items append and somewhat conflict with his ability to survive Old One' attention: how far was he pushed, how far was the Old One one pushed, and what comes next? I don't know what is going to happen next, and I can't 100% say I feel excitement about that intrigue. I literally don't have a hint, because we've seen escalation to literally infinity as we understand it. To unpack that: your approach to narrative has a propensity for making absolute statements (this is fine!), but in this context if they're objective absolutes then things get confusing. It is really difficult to write conflict with Literally God, and one of the only ways to bound it is (as you've done) to have God treat existence as a plaything for its amusement. However, we escalated away from Daniel being a plaything to having damaged one of the Old One's other toys - and that blows the lid off what can happen next. It is really difficult to write conflict for someone who's literally invincible: the implication of this chapter is that Daniel was tortured for so long that time became meaningless, and then he was plopped back a few hours into the original timeline. Are threats to specifically him now functionally meaningless? Was the Old One blustering about the suffering he could inflict, after potentially flatlining his Resist-o-meter for eternities to no lasting effect? I don't know enough to say, because Daniel might be/is probably a subjective narrator. So in the end, the future is muddled. Will Daniel struggle and struggle again, destroying Lehesion and being shrunk down to a pinhead of psychic rage, with the idea that he hasn't broken, so he won't once more? Will Daniel bide his time with consideration for fear of his people receiving Old One attention and becoming more collateral damage for his battles? Will the Old One escalate, or guide Lehesion away to avert these events from happening in the first place?

Monsoon117

Gravitational dragon spawn with gravitation breath so strong it spawns singularities on dense matter? Why not.

serguzzle

To add onto my first point, earlier in the story the fact that Daniel not only noticed, but was impacts by Old One activity, was an idle curiosity before, and no one even thought twice about it. To have it highlighted here was super cool.

Monsoon117

Whenever I make absolute statements, they always come from a character, not from an omniscient narrator's POV. This means nothing in the story can be taken as absolute truth at all times, and it hints at a reality with truth supporting or not supporting the claim. Eg, Yawm spoke in many absolutes, but he lied many times. Schema's been more truthful, but still, there are times when he's lied to Daniel expressly. Imo, this gives a lot of opportunity for different twists and turns within the narrative based on information gathering, dialogue, etc. It also can give attentive readers a jump on Daniel or other characters for future plot points. Someone predicted Daniel's psionic drowning for instance. I've had some readers even predict very far off plot points that directly contradict what's been told. I think of this as a strength, not a weakness. I enjoy it a lot as an author too, which is important. Schema's recognition of time travel is an important point that will be explained in the future. You are right to note it.

serguzzle

Yeah, I generally assume the narrative only speaks to a limited perspective, and that's reliable in your writing here. Daniel has very keen insights into the universe around it, and the limitations of that insight can be a little murky sometimes. I think he's been shown to understand things and feel very confident when assessing weird shit, so as a reader I am prone to trusting his insights. This means that when I see something that doesn't add up, I'm more "wtf daniel" than I am "wtf monsoon", but it's something to track if there's a consistent disparity between reader expectations and results. Your writing style sets up some great layered narratives. I would say your strength is more internal narrative and introspection as opposed to external interactions, but there is a compounding effect when you have such strong voices projected into a world against each other. Who's telling the truth? Shit, I don't know, they're all extremely evocative. I'm glad that it also is something that excites you as a writer. I really enjoy the game of narrative subtext, and I can really tell how much you like it too.

Anonymous

You are a fantastic writer. Your points were detailed yet not bloated. Have you written anything available to read? Your writing structure is very satisfying.

Drew Rogers

schemas recognition of time travel really makes me think of how powerful it can be in the future. also it seems like daniel is sent back in time, not undone which shows intentional restraint from the old one or a limitation of time magic on him

Monsoon117

My other strength is fight scenes. Can't forget fight scenes. My weaknesses have been just about everything else lol.

Monsoon117

@William Christie, I think I've tried convincing Sergio he had potential as an author too at some point. I can't remember the kind of response I got at the time though.

Shane Fletcher

with his life creation abilities, could he make a dragon if he wanted? he can make live crabs, but maybe dragons would be to complicated with all of the abilities he would have to figure out how to give them. dragon fear, dragon eyes, breath, a connection to magic like the frog dragons... I cant think of anything else a dragon usually has in fantasy stories.. it depends on how godlike you'd want to make them.

justin

I would like to see the build up the guild, earth as an empire, and the army of Daniel getting stronger as well. Can't fight old ones every day.

serguzzle

@Drew Rogers we have seen how time magic is limited in interacting with Daniel's dimensionness, so that's an interesting angle. I can see the Old Ones not actually "changing time" as much as "reversing the time axis of the baseline universe Daniel/Schema usually reside in, and which the Old Ones have a window into". Those things are actually exactly the same thing, but the distinction is that Daniel seems to just sorta coexist in line with the linear time of his home universe, and all of a sudden this trend was broken. HMMM. @Monsoon117: Strong disagreement on your weaknesses. Fight scenes are strong if they are meaningful. Well-written fights can be interesting on their own, but that runs dry very quickly without context making them impactful to the players beyond threat of injury, etc. Your fight scenes have always been journeys of self-discovery, from "discovering my limits" to "discovering my strength" to "reflecting upon the consequences of my strength". Your fights are very personal and introspective, which is why I think they're particularly good. You might say that you find "action" to be your particular strength, and I can see that more - for example, one thing you do a lot is having characters gesticulate with their hands, and you make the environment they're in very kinematic and reactive to that. That said, the ultimate representation of this will be a six-armed alien that achieves a "words describing hand movements" to "words spoken" ratio of >1 - something to strive for! @William Christie, @Monsoon117: Thanks for the kind words. I think I remember Monsoon mentioning it, but I think I forgot to reply, sorry - It's been a busy few months. I actually do write a lot - mostly technical papers, strategy documents, proposals, a few op-eds, etc. Not a lot of time to dedicate to fiction, unfortunately. I used to be active in fanfiction (I partially taught myself english reading it, so it stuck a bit), but not as much nowadays. If you ever read the webnovel Worm, I wrote a short fanfic of it called Watchdog a few years back. I think it's my best fiction work, aside from some collaborative efforts during a few quests in forums.

Anonymous

Bruh, I always consume this content through text to speech. This chapter was almost crippling because I could not get to my phone. Resist.

Monsoon117

Ah, I literally thought of having to adjust this specific section because it wouldn't translate to audio format well at all. Sorry about that.

Conor McGroarty

Guess Daddy Eonoth is still troublesome even though Daniel is physically tougher now. Even messed with his mind