What do you think!? (Patreon)

I am working on the ending to this week's video, it's a comedy review as you are used to, but at the end I thought I'd try something new.

I have about half of this ending here, what I am unsure about is the script itself, what do you guys think?

This is a spoiler of sorts, it doesn't give away exactly what the video is about, and I am planning on redoing this part, but still only watch if you are sure :D

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=efbuTlpMwqs