Jupiter Jet Issue 1 Page 5 - Script to Page Comparison (Patreon)

PANEL 1

Back in the repair shop. Jacky steps out from behind a CHANGING SCREEN dressed like a CUTE SHOP GIRL (calf length skirt with polka dots, pink fuzzy cardigan, pin curled hair, dark pillbox hat, dark Mary Jane shoes). Chuck frowns at her as he hold a couple piles of cash.

1. CHUCK: Rats! There’s enough here for the rent, but not the protection. The goons will be here soon.

2. JACKY: Here I thought things would be easier now that my alter ego is busting up toughs.

3. CHUCK: If Dad were here, he could bring in some customers. But, we haven’t had one in weeks. What are we going to do?

PANEL 2

From the ground looking up at Chuck in the foreground. Chuck is rooting around in the sack. His entire left arm is buried inside the sack.

Jacky stands behind him with her hands on her hips.

1. JACKY: Times are tough for us, for everyone in Olympic Heights. Maybe we should --

2. CHUCK: I’m not going to live on the farm, Jacky.

PANEL 3

Push in closer. Chuck sits straight up. He holds a GLOWING GREEN PYRAMID in front of his face that he just pulled out of the sack. His eyes are crossed.

Jacky has her hands on her face in shock.

1. CHUCK: Jacky, what’s this?

PANEL 4

Tight insert on Jupiter Jet’s jetpack. It’s leaning on the seat of a table chair. It’s starting to glow blue and make noise. 

1.SFX: ZZZZZZZZZZ

PANEL 5

With the jetpack in foreground, we see Chuck and Jacky stare in confusion at her jetpack. What the hell is going on?

1.CHUCK: And why is it making your jetpack glow.