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I did it. I finally finished a story. It's kind of a weird random one though, and I didn't stick very closly to the initial prompt I had, so I had to rewrite the beginning. All in all, I would saw that in terms of construction, this one is  a bit of a Frankenstein, but I hope that doesn't show. It takes place in a fictional setting called Big Beaver Lake, which I'm really vague about locating, but it's probably in the Southern United States, like Louisiana. The setting isn't that important though. I just like to give a bit of description to a setting to reinforce that this isn't exactly our world, that it's a special strange place with weird rules and supernatural influences. I talk about bigfoots and aliens as if they're real, because to the people of Big Beaver Lake, they are.

The setting COULD be used again, but knowing me I'd rather skip around to other new ideas. This particular story focuses on a 25 year old "lake pirate" named Richard Koch (basically an uber-Chad who spends all day on his boat, fucking slutty lake girls), who comes to the rescue of three eighteen year old teens who've become stranded on an island. Richard isn't going to help them out of the kindness of his heart though. 

I've only proof-read it once, so help me out and look for errors. 

Comments

Anonymous

Loved the story, really liked how you were able to make Richard still dominating but not going into "pure asshole" territory.

Dvspuss

Congratulations, it is great I liked the back and forth between the characters and how the main girl had some fighting power and called the guy on his shit I just hoped to see more of the fem boy in the story, hope to see more from you

Matty Thunders

Love the bully themed stuff

Anonymous

Found a few typos and some of the grammar could be cleaned up. I could do that for you if you like.

John Smith

Hmm not bad granted I don't see a massive difference from previous work. I think more real world stories do help tighten your focus. If its Fantasy, Pre History, Sci-Fi, etc you got way more worldbuilding to do. But I like a bit more fantasy elements so maybe the best balance is Superhero and Sex Games stories that split the different.

markydaysaid

YES! Fantasy worlds are always very tempting, because you can make up any contrivance you want to move the story along. Magical teleportation. Magical aphrodisiacs. But I ALWAYS bog myself down with a bunch of unsexy minutia that eats up word-counts.

SorrowBorn

Hhmmm, I like it. Its a good bloody read and shows a great deal of improvement over prior stories. Thank you for this man.

Anonymous

I agree with John, it seems you were able to focus on the story and characters a little more with the part real world design. Also, it was just a sexy story to, so great job!

Dantels

Beaver Lake is a very fun idea.

Anonymous

Hey great job! Really liked it. You have a talent for this.