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Not sure if I should bold "the stranger" in that dialogue, hmm hmm

Roshim is pretty expressive in these pages compared to the first chapter; we should definitely get the feeling that he's comfortable and maybe a little more naive

Let me know if something doesn't sit right with the dialogue, I've been staring at it for a minute

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Deviant

I think the dialog here is pretty solid! I do like the bold text for "the stranger", it emphasizes that it's a proper noun and is significant

Mr. Morebucks

I agree w/ Deviant. "The Stranger" implies a person of potentially mythical or social importance. Everything in the dialogue is flowing naturally. It's looking awesome!