Peles got Nothing on Me Rough 2 (Patreon)

Here is the rough page 2. I was waiting to see if the notes were addressed before posting but they have no been. I didn't want to wait to long. 

HEAR ME OUT: the main male character is written to be/look more native Hawaiian. We are addressing that in the notes now, since I want JAW be inclusive in the characters we cover. In addition, both him and Pele will have darker skin, it's just not shaded in yet. So please understand this isn't whitewashing, it's just rough art. I did a good amount of reading up on Pele to try and represent her accurately as well. And yes I understand the irony of doing character research for a growthy smut comic, but I'm trying. (In this instance/part of the myth, Pele can assume the form of a white dog as well as the form of a elderly lady and a beautiful girl)

Thank you and here the writing:

Page 2

Panel 1 Medium. The two are hiking up a small rock face, there's smoke from the lava just over the hill.

Panel 2 Medium wide, Annabelle is falling back, her hands having slipped/her legs missed a step. Theres -rumble- sound effects, things are shaking from a small earthquake. Annebelle “eeeps”

Panel 3 Kemea catches Annabelle, he smiles lovingly. Annabelles bust is jiggling and is slightly larger now, her pants are also starting to look shrunk around her.

Kemea “Careful there, theres a lot of earthquakes when things get hot and flowing out here”

Annabelle “Well I guess it's good I have my own little demigod to catch me.”

Panel 4 WIDE This is meant to be one seamless panel across the top of the middle of the page

The white dog walks towards the couple; she passes behind a large rock. When she appears on the other side of the rock we now see a beautiful and curvy hawaiian girl. Shes the classic depiction of Pele. Her skirt and shirt have lava accents on them, her hair is long and black. She has on a crown of flowers.