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So. The last few days have been spent sinking a lot of time into the next chapter of Big Changes. I can't even begin to tell you how many hours I have sunk into this, but the thing is I am kind of on the fence about it. I guess I am looking for some feedback if anyone wants to give some. The point of this little story was supposed to be kinda quirky and funny but I think I may have missed the tone. It feels a little bogged down. I'm not saying it's bad, but it might just be my imagination. Anyways, It's nearing completion I just have one small scene to write to wrap up the story, and then comes the editing phase. I foresee the editing phase being more in-depths than normal, and I will probably end up trimming a lot from this story just to make it flow better and get the feel of it more in line with what I had in mind, but for the time being I would love another set of eyes on it and some feedback.

Oh, and I have another short WIP I am gonna showcase as well. The other day I had a hardcore case of insomnia and when I can't sleep I write. I wrote through the night and well into the morning. It was nearly noon by the time I was getting close to winding down, and then I lost power. Fortunately Word has an autosave function but I still lost a solid four pages of writing, and the momentum had completely left me to say the least. I dunno when I will get back to this story because I have a stack of WIPs that I plan to work through over the next few weeks (including the next Gooed Friends and the next Minige a Trois which take high priority) but I thought I'd show the first half of this short story for those who love a bit of quick and dirty macro muscle growth.