Bedtime stories Chapter 1: King's quest [Advanced] (Patreon)

Here's the first transformation story based on your comments. I took Rtrose suggestion this time. I'm sharing with you a little fragment in this post but you can read the full story in the attached files. I would really love to read your comments,  and any feedback you want to give will be very appreciatted.

" Arthur could feel what was happening to his body but wasn’t able to see it fully and that scared him, he would need a mirror in front of him to see with horror the appearance he was acquiring. It began with a terrible pain growing from his bones that were getting bigger making his torso start to gain volume and muscle mass while his abdomen, previously firm and defined by a fair amount of exercise began to swell with fat and muscle, turning into a round gray and hairy belly."