Liza's new challenge, 2nd Draft (Patreon)

Here's the 2nd draft of Liza's story. On the last page you can leave a comment about the story, what would you change, or anything else.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1D9UmPI8-cIaiV5PIWvZzrpEnyjCeP-qa5Hx6Wz7q_-E/edit?usp=sharing