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Predators of Denali - Page 5 Sketch (Patreon)

Published:
2017-08-30 23:18:40
Imported:
2020-09

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Tala quickly finds the answer to her question, and is a little taken aback and not sure how to respond or what to think at all. At least she's the only one who's noticed.

She'll meet Bailey formally very soon, but for now I think this is a good first introduction to her for the reader.

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Anonymous

Looks like Skellitor301 called it.

Anonymous

Love her expression in the last panel. XD

Heretic Morgan

oh man, she seems so innocent. Wonder how that's gonna play out.

iceFox

"She'll meet Bailey formally very soon" - I think this is as formal as Bailey will ever get :P

SVKwolf

Pfft Fluff, just one? Don't you know everything's better in two? x3

Anonymous

Haha damn.

August kowalski

Hoping she gets under there with her :3

Evangellos

It'd be funny if the chief was, apparently, Bailey's father, taking a likeness to Ayn, haha!

Silvador

oh yes, very good! I love that she's also topless under there. Such a naughty bear and chief. Still really hoping there is some blood relation between the two... >.>

Bionet

This is Bailey's first appearance in any story-focused work of yours, right Fluff? It's kind of exciting to see her in a narrative context! Also, Tala's reaction to what's under the table is hilarious, she seems so shocked!

Antoine Davis

You know, there're times in which we can wait for certain things, going out on a date, looking for food or even finding someone to love even if it takes weeks if not months...............this is not one of those times. Also, i read the dialogue and i think it would be better if it turns out that some or most Prey and Predators are just starting to cooperate and that it doesn't have to be some type of drug. That just seems a bit, used before and that it should just be a theory to them if not just Tiga jumping to conclusions for i know that he would with some of the dialogue that i read. But yeah that's just me, this is still amazing though. If you have any questions for me fluff just ask.

Antoine Davis

Also what i mean is that instead it should be that things are starting to change for the better. I mean yeah some predators are still hunting down prey but try to show that some predators actually want to give prey a chance in which they learn how nice most of them are. But like i said in my earlier comment that it could be Tiga jumping to conclusions, or trying to use some drug or toxin that messes with them when it's probably not that at all and that the predators are just trying to be friend prey and or some of them are just predators who never kill any prey and are being discovered now. But still i hope this comic becomes successful and like i said if you have any questions just ask.

Antoine Davis

I mean i could be wrong, but either way it just seems a bit more story dirven for future comics than it just being a plant for i know that there maybe consequences when using the plant. But still it seems a bit, fowl play. But still this is just a rough draft page and that things including the art, dialouge, and scenes do change on the actually pages but i just hope that you would take my comments to consideration.

Antoine Davis

Also, if what I'm saying is right then just like in the last draft Tiga probably just doesn't like this and wants to just kill. I mean of course there're still some predators out there in the world that still kill prey. But, maybe some places are starting to change also of course it could just be a large amount of predators still hunting prey but some don't, but i don't think that a plant should be used as a reason instead of something not going his way personally and that he's just whining about it. Also when and how did he discover this? I dunno, either way i feel like there could be better options for what's going on but if you are the creator of the comic. That's just how i see it, or maybe it could be something that's completely different that nobody knows about in which it doesn't involve drugs, yeah i know that "A small plant unknown to most predator races, that prey find easier to track and gather" is only a theory, or something that Tiga believes is it, or it could be true, i don't know this. But still it just seems too easy of a reason. But like i said i could be completely wrong, but it just seems..well i wouldn't say out of place, but something close to that. Again this is amazing, and i hope to see you continue to progress and succeed. If you have questions or any concerns just ask me and I'll answer them. I mean, I'm not telling you how to write your comic, it's just something that i noticed in detail of the dialogue and just was curious and had questions for it. But if it does sound like that then i apologize for i don't want to tell you what to do, that's not it at all. I just noticed the details and just had thoughts about them, even though this is a rough draft. Like i said, I'm not telling you what to do, i enjoy the comic but it's just things that i noticed.

SwiftKitten

LOL, oh god that's hilarious XD