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Update: Chapter 5 Dialogue Overhaul (Patreon)

Published:

2020-12-28 19:15:18

Imported:

2023-03

Content

Hey friends!

As I've been writing I decided to make some smol edits to the dialogue of certain pages of Chapter 5 in order for the story to flow better with some much-needed/improved direction.

I've listed out the pages below and hyperlinked them to the updated posts. Check them out!

I also edited the dialogue of a few pages in the fight scene between Cerberus Nine and Jin/Nami to give Nami more speaking roles and to identify her magic. It felt much more smooth that way and it fleshed out Nami's role in these parts a bit too, albeit in nuanced ways hehe.

Lmk what you think of these changes! :3 I'm excited to hear your feedback.

-J