Drive-Thru 8-14 (Patreon)

So the art style gets really inconsistent here, as months go by between pages. At this point I am really suffering from the rookie mistakes I made at the start, like not having a consistent format, not knowing what the story would be or should be or how to pace things, etc. And the mistakes don't stop there, I rushed and posted page 10 with multiple glaring errors, and so I made a note of it for one of those "Find the differences between these two pictures" things.

I have a story concept now that I want to share but it will take at least another two pages of mostly dialogue, and am I even a good writer? Should I not just have a narrator explain things efficiently but uncreatively?