Page edits- batch 1 (Patreon)

I should have 3 batches of edits, thankfully the next ones are a lot smaller!

I don't think it's necessarily a huge improvement- but they've been bothering me for years and it's nice to finally have alternate ideas. At the time it felt very hard to think of other ways to get stuff across, I'm glad I seem to have improved! 

The Jerry scene- she felt too mean! And also it came across as though she already knew Julien well-  his lack of close friends- and she wouldn't actually know that yet (she finds out when he has to borrow money from them). I changed it so it hopefully reads more like she's making an assumption. Also I can include that Jerry is a lady, which people did not pick up on for a while.

I also felt like the venue speech bubbles were just slightly clumsy. It also now establishes that he should be on his way...and he isn't...for Some reason ;P.

The designer clothes line change was because I actually don't think Julien is stupid enough to buy designer clothes during a money crisis.  He's pretty irresponsible, but he IS struggling and it's not entirely his own bad choices (needs two jobs that conflict to afford rent).

The boss firing scene- Again! Too mean for a grown adult, he felt too shouty, where I wanted it to feel very justified. I toned down the expressions and added more reasoning. I also didn't like the pacing of Julien jumping straight from cowering to 'actually philip was there' so I added some rambling defence beforehand (which also hopefully makes the boss seem more in the right, instead of steamrolling Julien completely.) 

Oh! I also got rid of Julien's 'inner voice' because I don't use thought bubbles anywhere else as far as I remember!

I allowed myself to make minor art edits on the pages I did text edits on, so theres a few small changes (mostly the eyes...ugh)