English translation test! (Rin Todo's Daily Life) (Pixiv Fanbox)

Hi guys, I'm back! For my rehabilitation of drawing and editing, I've translated my previous work (Rin Todo's Daily Life) to English. I'm really glad to hear your inputs about the quality of this translation! Let me know if you find grammatical errors and know better onomatopoeia and words to make the translation much lewder. To be honest, this took almost 2-day full-time work, and I find it a bit difficult to motivate me to continue the translation work (since my dick was not happy at all during the work, haha). So, in the future, I may have two lines of translation products: (1) text translation (a text file will be provided with bubble numbers - free) and (2) full-image translation (like the images above - products for the donators). But, it's not definitive. Please let me know what you think!