Manga practice #1 (Pixiv Fanbox)

I drew the last page today! I tried to give feedback while drawing it was being drawn 1. I think should focus to the flow of reading 2. Adapt to cartoon-sized canvas 3. Don't fill in the full canvas?? (I'm not sure about this. Other artists use spaces, but I want to draw it like a collection of illustrations rather than like that.) (Comic but illustration collection? lol) 4. How to distinguish between dialogue and sound effects I think it's about this much! It's really fun to draw various pictures I'm not going to complete it. It was a cartoon for practice I don't think it's possible to complete the later works perfectly either But I'm going to draw it more complemented than before!