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The anime-style attempt work is finished ~ how do you think?


I'll go first, to be honest, I feel something wrong just the first few pages... at the end I was force myself to finish it with the professional spirit, yes, I'm not very satisfied with this comic.

Now is time for review - I myself feel that there are two main problems, the plot and the art style.


The plot I thought was good at the time of conception, but when I entered the actual work suddenly felt where strange, as if not quite the same as imagined, although the story of this one was not intended to be too important, just casually find an excuse to engage in NTR and blackmail, but still feel very not smooth.


In retrospect, it doesn't matter what the plot is, what is more important is the rhythm, even in how ridiculous the plot as long as the rhythm is well controlled, still can be very erotic, the proportion of male characters, the number of the page ... man, H-comic is really difficult...


In the past, I used to draw one storyboard one page, I once thought that this was a very free and won't waste time, now I decided that I would be a good boy and finish the whole storyboard  of the story before I started, so that I could also control the number of pages in a sentence...


I think people who draw comics should think "Isn't it something obvious?", ahem, true, but I think there are advantages to not drawing storyboard, the specific advantage is "to understand why we need to draw storyboard"... right?


In addition is the problem of character style, after all it's too anime ... 3D is 3D, abstract style face in many angles will be broken, expressions are not easy to do (easily broken), although the anime face is cute, but in fact... not so cute :^P.


The style of the "The Rose Fall Into Darkness" is good already, I think I'll back to "The Rose" character style, but this time the anime style try has find some new ways to beautify the character, I guess we can apply them to future character~


Anyway, although it is not a perfect work, but still hope you'll like it :^P, then let us look forward to the next work!

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Anonymous

脸还是以前那种更喜欢w

Conor

I think having the girl have some background and interaction before the sex will make them more appealing during sex. You mention the rhythm is off, yeah she goes from angry to apologetic in 1 page and then on her knees afterwards. That makes it hard for me to imagine her as a real person. If you want to go further, we don't really know why she's desperate to save the club and attached to it. Sure, you don't need must story in porn but for me having characters act in a semi-realistic way helps the sexiness.

Conor

Like this vanilla stuff from tsukinowagamo- https://exhentai.org/g/1107706/e5d7d8660a/ - was really sexy from the simple story with believable characters, nevermind the gorgeous art. Same with alot of napata's stuff.